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00Long years ago in Australia a man had a dog named Buck, he was a very good dog and he had the best life a dog could have in the world. One day the owner of the dog sells his dog to someone. The dog liked the life in Australia because he had home and a worm bed. Buck’s new owner wants to take the dog into another part of the world. So he took him to a very cold place named Iceland so he could sell the dog for more money. In Iceland people bought dogs because of they needed it to carry their stuff from one place to another place. The dog’s new owners name was Don; he was not so kind to dogs. The man had many dogs they carried his stuffs from one place to another. He bought products cheaper and sold it for more money. He used the dog to push his sledge on the way. Buck and the other dogs always got food so they could be strong and do Don’s job. Buck works for him for a long time, time goes and Don by the time release that Buck is weaker so he sells him to another kind man named Jonathan and who loves dogs. 02br
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00Buck and Jonathan spend their life together and they had fun. Buck’s love for Jonathan gets more and more by the time. They are together in ten years until one bad day comes when they got separated. The day when they were together for the last time was when they arrived to meet some friends who lived far away from Jonathans home. But on the way to their friends Jonathan suddenly saw some people he had heard from people that they killed dogs and ate them. The men got bows and knifes so they could use it to kill the dog and eat it. Jonathan had heard about those men so he said to Buck it’s time to you to go otherwise those men will kill you. They cried and a moment later Buck ran far away. The men didn’t notice that Jonathan had a dog with him so they didn’t do anything to him. Days, months, years passes and Buck tries to find Jonathan but can’t find him so he decide to live on the wilds so he can start a different life than he had on his half life. The last moment for Buck comes when a wolf kills him in the Jungle.0-
  

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02br 02br 00I have underlined some problem areas in your story:02i 02br 01h1 01b 00Buck the 01u 00dog02u 02b 02h1 00Long years ago in Australia a man hada dog named 01u 00Buck, he02u 00 was a very good dog and he had the best life a dogcould have in the world. One day the owner of the dog 01u 00sells02u 00 his dog tosomeone. The dog liked 01u 00the02u 00 life in Australia because he 01u 00had home02u 00 and a01u 00worm02u 00 bed.

  • 02br 02br 00I have underlined some problem areas in your story:02i 02br 01h1 01b 00Buck the 01u 00dog02u 02b 02h1 00Long years ago in Australia a man hada dog named 01u 00Buck, he02u 00 was a very good dog and he had the best life a dogcould have in the world.
  • One day the owner of the dog 01u 00sells02u 00 his dog tosomeone.
  • The dog liked 01u 00the02u 00 life in Australia because he 01u 00had home02u 00 and a01u 00worm02u 00 bed.
  • Buck’s new owner 01u 00wants02u 00 to take the dog 01u 00into02u 00 another part ofthe 01u 00world.
  • So02u 00 he took him to a very cold place named Iceland 01u 00so02u 00 hecould sell the dog for more money.
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