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Twistedwhisper Posted 21 years ago
Letter Writing
Sponsorship letter...please give opinions...ASAP!
hey people... i found this forum really helpful... i'm actually applying for a private scholarship... please review my draft...and point out any weak points i should improve on...thanks!
Dear sir,
Application for scholarship
Having finished my secondary school education a year ago, I would like to continue my studies under a foundation program in Bradford College,University of Adelaide. Thus, I would like to apply for a scholarship from you in order to pursue my higher education.
2. I have already started my GCE ‘A’ levels in a college in Malaysia, however, this foundation will only be completed next year in 2006. I find that the duration needed to finish this programme will cause a much longer time than needed for me to finish my degree. Thus, I would like to ask for you help to sponsor me in the quick course in the foundation programme in order to shorten the time period.
3. Although I have achieved good results in my Sijil Pelajaran Malaysia(SPM) in 2003 with 10A’s, I have been unable to secure a place for a scholarship. With your kind consideration in awarding me a scholarhsip, I will be able to pursue my higher education independently without needing financial assistance from my family.
4. I have chosen Bradford College,Adelaide University to continue my higher education because it is one of the best universities in Australia. Moreover, Adelaide provides a conducive place for studying as it is not a busy city thus minimising the probability of students gettind distracted for their main purpose which is to gain a proper education.
5. After completing my foundation studies, I intend to read Economics in the University of Adelaide as this will provide me with the necessary foundation needed to pursue knowledge in other branches of the economy and get myself involved in the business arena. Moreover, a degree in Economics will help me get a wider understanding of how a country’s economy works.
I hope that you will look favourably on my application and that I will hear from you in the near future.
Dear sir,
Application for scholarship
Having finished my secondary school education a year ago, I would like to continue my studies under a foundation program in Bradford College,University of Adelaide. Thus, I would like to apply for a scholarship from you in order to pursue my higher education.
2. I have already started my GCE ‘A’ levels in a college in Malaysia, however, this foundation will only be completed next year in 2006. I find that the duration needed to finish this programme will cause a much longer time than needed for me to finish my degree. Thus, I would like to ask for you help to sponsor me in the quick course in the foundation programme in order to shorten the time period.
3. Although I have achieved good results in my Sijil Pelajaran Malaysia(SPM) in 2003 with 10A’s, I have been unable to secure a place for a scholarship. With your kind consideration in awarding me a scholarhsip, I will be able to pursue my higher education independently without needing financial assistance from my family.
4. I have chosen Bradford College,Adelaide University to continue my higher education because it is one of the best universities in Australia. Moreover, Adelaide provides a conducive place for studying as it is not a busy city thus minimising the probability of students gettind distracted for their main purpose which is to gain a proper education.
5. After completing my foundation studies, I intend to read Economics in the University of Adelaide as this will provide me with the necessary foundation needed to pursue knowledge in other branches of the economy and get myself involved in the business arena. Moreover, a degree in Economics will help me get a wider understanding of how a country’s economy works.
I hope that you will look favourably on my application and that I will hear from you in the near future.
Top answer
Hi, I think you need to consider your arguments carefully. I do not know what sort of organisation you are applying to, but be sure that your letter shows how you fulfill all their requirements for scholarship. Generally - don't number your paragraphs.
- Hi, I think you need to consider your arguments carefully.
- I do not know what sort of organisation you are applying to, but be sure that your letter shows how you fulfill all their requirements for scholarship.
- Generally - don't number your paragraphs.
- Check for typos.
- Para 2: I cannot follow this.
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Hi,
I think you need to consider your arguments carefully. I do not know what sort of organisation you are applying to, but be sure that your letter shows how you fulfill all their requirements for scholarship.
Generally - don't number your paragraphs. Check for typos.
Para 2: I cannot follow this. What are you asking for? Are you saying you want to skip doing y
I think you need to consider your arguments carefully. I do not know what sort of organisation you are applying to, but be sure that your letter shows how you fulfill all their requirements for scholarship.
Generally - don't number your paragraphs. Check for typos.
Para 2: I cannot follow this. What are you asking for? Are you saying you want to skip doing y
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