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Could you please help me correct these sentences and look over my corrections?

1 I've killed worse things than you. (a monster)./I've killed things worse than you. 2nd choice
2 Why don't you turn the water off when you wash/are washing the dishes? BOTH
3 I need the ID of the person whose name the reservation in. NOT SURE
4 I've worked in just about all the hotels. OK
5 Caress me like I'm doing you/the same way I'm doing you. NOT SURE
6 From the very beginning of the movie, you know it's a movie where the bad guy doesn't die.
7 This is quite reflective of the real situation of these artists at that point of time. "in time"
8 Every time you press the button, it fast forwards the song 30 second, pressing it 5 times gets you through the whole song. OK
9 I'll be experienced in a few years once I've done more than my share of the work.
10 What guarantees do I have that you'll give it back.

Thank you

Doctor D · Accepted Answer

Here are my suggestions.

1 I've killed worse things than you. (a monster)./I've killed things worse than you. 2nd choice
Either. There is a slight change of emphasis. The first wording stresses "things." The second stresses "worse."

2 Why don't you turn the water off when you wash/are washing the dishes? BOTH (Yes, although I prefer "are washing.")

3 I need the ID of the person whose name the reservation in. NOT SURE
I need the ID of the person whose name the reservation is in.

4 I've worked in just about all the hotels. OK
OK, but clearer if specify. "I've worked in just about all the hotels in this city."

5 Caress me like I'm doing you/the same way I'm doing you. NOT SURE
Clearer if repeat verb: "Caress me in the same way that I am caressing you."

6 From the very beginning of the movie, you know it's a movie where the bad guy doesn't die.
OK (the "very" stresses the immediate knowledge you have.) But you don't need to repeat "movie."
"From the very beginning, you know it's a movie where the bad guy doesn't die."

7 This is quite reflective of the real situation of these artists at that point of time. "in time"
Yes, "at that point in time."

8 Every time you press the button, it fast forwards the song 30 second, pressing it 5 times gets you through the whole song. OK
Nearly okay, except for the punctuation. Don't use a comma. Use either a semicolon or make two separate sentences.
"Every time you press the button, it fast forwards the song 30 seconds. Pressing it five times gets you through the whole song."

9 I'll be experienced in a few years once I've done more than my share of the work.
The sense of this is confusing. Are you trying to say "Because I'm doing more than my share of the work, in a few years I'll be more experienced than my coworkers" ?

10 What guarantees do I have that you'll give it back.
The "s" is not needed. You are talking about a single guarantee. Also, this is a question requiring a question mark.

Hope this helps.

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