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Henbeibi Posted 21 years ago
Essay & Composition Writing
Special Gift
I wrote a short essay about a special gift I've received.
I suppose there are some grammer mistakes in my essay. Thank you for check it.
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About four years ago, my wife bought me a CD player as birthday present.
The player is silver and very thin. It’s also very elegant in appearance.
I think it has great meaning for me because it’s my first one and I received it from the most important person in my life.
It is slightly old now for having been used for four years, but it is still working perfectly.
I often use it to listen to my favourite music, or listen to some English audio to improve my English.
So I think it’s not only a beautiful present, it’s quite useful as well.
Despite the high price, I think the money deserves it.
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I suppose there are some grammer mistakes in my essay. Thank you for check it.
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About four years ago, my wife bought me a CD player as birthday present.
The player is silver and very thin. It’s also very elegant in appearance.
I think it has great meaning for me because it’s my first one and I received it from the most important person in my life.
It is slightly old now for having been used for four years, but it is still working perfectly.
I often use it to listen to my favourite music, or listen to some English audio to improve my English.
So I think it’s not only a beautiful present, it’s quite useful as well.
Despite the high price, I think the money deserves it.
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Top answer
Hi Henbeibi, Just my two cents: About four years ago, my wife bought me a CD player for my birthday present. The player is silver and very thin. It’s also very elegant in appearance.
- Hi Henbeibi, Just my two cents: About four years ago, my wife bought me a CD player for my birthday present.
- The player is silver and very thin.
- It’s also very elegant in appearance.
- I think it has a great meaning for me because it’s my first one and I received it from the most important person in my life.
- It is slightly old now for having been used for four years (redun--you can get rid of it) , but it is still working perfectly.
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Hi Henbeibi,
Just my two cents:
About four years ago, my wife bought me a CD player for my birthday present.
The player is silver and very thin. It’s also very elegant in appearance.
I think it has a great meaning for me because it’s my first one and I received it from the most important person in my life.
It is slightly old now for having
Just my two cents:
About four years ago, my wife bought me a CD player for my birthday present.
The player is silver and very thin. It’s also very elegant in appearance.
I think it has a great meaning for me because it’s my first one and I received it from the most important person in my life.
It is slightly old now for having
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Julielai
Hi Henbeibi,
Just my two cents:
About four years ago, my wife bought me a CD player for my birthday present.
The player is silver and very thin. It’s also very elegant in appearance.
I think it has a great meaning for me because it’s my first one and I received it from the most important person in my life.
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Hi YoHf,
The reason why it has a great meaning for me is that it has been my first one and it was bought from the most important person in my life.
I'd get rid of "bought". "Bought from" sounds odd to me.
Just my two cents though.
The reason why it has a great meaning for me is that it has been my first one and it was bought from the most important person in my life.
I'd get rid of "bought". "Bought from" sounds odd to me.
Just my two cents though.
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JulielaiHi YoHf,Mmm... You're quite right indeed... However let him
The reason why it has a great meaning for me is that it has been my first one and it was bought from the most important person in my life.
I'd get rid of "bought". "Bought from" sounds odd to me.
Just my two cents though.
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About four years ago my wife bought me a CD player as birthday present.
The player is silver, very thin and elegant in appearance.
It has great meaning for me because it is my first one and I received it from the most important person in my life.
I have used it often and it is slightly worn now but it still working perfectly.
I use it to listen to my favourite music or E
The player is silver, very thin and elegant in appearance.
It has great meaning for me because it is my first one and I received it from the most important person in my life.
I have used it often and it is slightly worn now but it still working perfectly.
I use it to listen to my favourite music or E
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YoHfOr is it?Sorry, I didn't look at the name of the poster. Thought you were the perso
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<The reason why it has a great meaning for me is that it has been my first one and it was bought from the most important person in my life.>
Not quite right. Rather:
"The reason it means a lot to me is that it was my first one, and was given (to) me by the most important person in my life."
<Even if it has become
Not quite right. Rather:
"The reason it means a lot to me is that it was my first one, and was given (to) me by the most important person in my life."
<Even if it has become
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