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Taka Posted 18 years ago
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0Could somebody check if these sentences sound OK as English?02br
00・When you are young, you don't think that the most important thing in your life is what will bring you the most benefit, but that in your life your dreams and ideals are also important. Friends you make during that time are precious.0-
  

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02i 02br 02br 00This seems grammatically correct to me, but it doesn't seem to entirely make sense. You're essentially saying "A isn't the most important thing, but B is also important". The contrast expected from "but" doesn't materialise.

— Mr Wordy

  • 02i 02br 02br 00This seems grammatically correct to me, but it doesn't seem to entirely make sense.
  • You're essentially saying "A isn't the most important thing, but B is also important".
  • The contrast expected from "but" doesn't materialise.
  • Do you mean that the most important things are dreams and ideals rather than the things that bring the most benefit?
  • Or do you mean that the most important things are not those that bring the most benefit, and, by the way (as a new thought), dreams and ideals are important?
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1i00When you are young, you don't think that the most important thing in your life is what will bring you the most benefit, but that in your life your dreams and ideals are also important.02i02br
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00This seems grammatically correct to me, but it doesn't seem to entirely make sense. You're essentially saying "A isn't the most important thing, but B is also i
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0Yes, it sounds OK, but a little long and wordy. I might change 'also' to 'more', and I would begin the second sentence with 'the'.0-
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01cite10Old Man Gordon12cite10Yes, it sounds OK, but a little long and wordy.  I might change 'also' to 'more', and I would begin the second sentence with 'the'.12br
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10Thank you, Mr. Gordon.02br
00How would you make it simple? 0-
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0When you are young, dreams and ideals are more important to you than benefit and profit.02br
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00How's that?0-
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0That's very simple!02br
00Thanks, Gordon! 0-
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0Hi Taka,02br
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00I think you got some excellent comments.02br
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00Clive0-
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