SOP for Masters!

Hi all,
Could some one please check my SOP below for grammatical mistakes and typos and also advise if there is any thing I can change or add to improve it? Your feedback is highly appreciated.

Pursuing a customer-oriented career while being a reticent individual, love working with numbers while I was not always the mathematical genius in class are some examples portraying who I am. As contradicting as it sounds, my curiosity always tickles me to challenge myself in different fields, explore my potentials and exceed my limits. In order to prepare myself for the next challenge of starting a finance profession, pursuing further education at xxx is a crucial step to prepare myself to advent into the fast moving industry.

Dating back to high school years, my interest in Economics started the moment I stepped onto xxx shore, seeing how much more modern and developed this country was compared to xxx. It kept growing by the urge to find my own answer to this puzzle through the lens of Economics, which further led me into the fascinating financial market. It connects all economic agents in such a fickle and vulnerable relationship where downturns happen in a split second depending on the demand and supply of securities and commodities. My degree at one of the most reputed Economics department has prepared me with quantitative and analytical skills that will be strong assets to my higher education. I have focused majority of my studies on mathematical and statistical modules including list of modules.

The world expands beyond textbooks and research paper, which is why I place great scrutiny in extracurricular activities and work experiences; from actively involving in numerous cultural activities held by xxx Student Society to wandering to different parts of the world. Traveling reinforced my career persuasion. No matter how different people’s background, social status and walks of life are, they all share one similarity: going through drastic changes and difficulties as the results of the economic downturns. The more I understand, the more I appreciate my chance of studying Economics to make a difference.

Upon graduating from university, I joined a bursting multinational E-commerce company, in which I got a chance to contribute my communication skills, flexibility and enthusiasm for the constant innovation in this fast-paced and demanding industry. Nearly a year after, I moved to my current company to get exposure to a more traditional market segment - manufacturing industry. Winning the sales is great, however the most rewarding experience is chance to implement my knowledge to help the company utilise Internet to reach a more diverse market quickly at a lower cost as well as to improve its order fulfillment process. Besides soft skills such as customer service, time management skill that I have acquired, changes and challenges which the job entails motivated me to perform my best everyday. Having excelled in my both jobs in 2 drastically different professional environments, I am certain that I will adapt to the challenging and rigorous nature of the program.

In an increasingly competitive global workplace, the need to differentiate oneself from the rest of the crowd has never been more important. Home to many leading financial professionals and institutions, The US would be an ideal place for my master degree and I am thrilled to learn from the great in xxx. I am certain my study would help me grow in professional and personal front, as I would be surrounded by people who can teach me to inspire, innovate and lead. Holding a xxx degree at your university will equip me with sought-after knowledge and skills for the fast evolving financial job market. These include ability to use mathematical and statistical methods to properly analyse financial instruments and financial markets. Moreover, the 2 courses with the focus on honing communication and writing skills of students which run along with other theoretical subjects prove the university emphasis on training students to be well rounded individuals.

My professional goals are two-fold. Landing a job in finance and investment in the US is one of them. My initial goal immediately after graduation is to obtain a rigorous, demanding and rewarding position in this profession. In 10 years, I see myself establishing my own company like my mother. The future is uncertain but as flexible as I am, I plan to take advantage of all available opportunities to advance myself over the course of my career. I am firmly convinced that xxx will provide a milestone in my career along with invaluable experiences that will allow me to gain the ability necessary to succeed in finance profession and assist in accomplishing both my short-term and long-term goals. My experience has taught me to stay focused and committed to not only my passion but also social activities. It would be a honour to be able to contribute to both academic and social aspects of the program, and be a great asset to xxx in the long term. I greatly appreciate your consideration of my application and hope that the information mentioned above has shown my abilities, career goals and my passion to be a part of the institution.