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Jameseastt Posted 15 years ago
Essay & Composition Writing
Song lyrics
Hi, everyone! These are the lyrics to my new song. Being not a native speaker, it's very interesting, how it sounds to native speakers. I appreciate all corrections and assumptions about this song. After corrections, the song will be recorded and posted on youtube, so I'd like it to sound at least not weird. Thanks a lot!
The fall
Looking deep into your eyes,
It seems that you're telling lies,
It's just the case it's still the same,
I won't go on, won't play this game,
I want your shine but you're not there,
This madness kills, it's fair and square,
I just can't leave, can't let you go,
The spring of love has changed to the fall...
When you speak,
When you call,
The spring of love has changed to the fall...
When we touch,
And it's cold,
The spring of love has changed to the...
Empty room I'm sitting in,
Blinds are drawn from within,
Trying to call but i can't get through,
This all reminds me just of you,
Shades envelop rusty soul,
All the way through to my core,
I just can't take it anymore,
The spring of love has changed to the fall
You should've kept that in the heart,
The beats were pounding from inside,
Where are they gone, they're swept away,
Cuz' whatever I do, it won't make you stay,
Someday I will realize,
The sun is shining and I wanna fly,
The music's playin' everywhere,
And those who love, the do not care....
The fall
Looking deep into your eyes,
It seems that you're telling lies,
It's just the case it's still the same,
I won't go on, won't play this game,
I want your shine but you're not there,
This madness kills, it's fair and square,
I just can't leave, can't let you go,
The spring of love has changed to the fall...
When you speak,
When you call,
The spring of love has changed to the fall...
When we touch,
And it's cold,
The spring of love has changed to the...
Empty room I'm sitting in,
Blinds are drawn from within,
Trying to call but i can't get through,
This all reminds me just of you,
Shades envelop rusty soul,
All the way through to my core,
I just can't take it anymore,
The spring of love has changed to the fall
You should've kept that in the heart,
The beats were pounding from inside,
Where are they gone, they're swept away,
Cuz' whatever I do, it won't make you stay,
Someday I will realize,
The sun is shining and I wanna fly,
The music's playin' everywhere,
And those who love, the do not care....
Top answer
Hi Jameseastt, Welcome to the forums! Nice lyrics. When it comes to artistic expression, the rules of language should be able to bend to fit the artist's intentions.
- Hi Jameseastt, Welcome to the forums!
- Nice lyrics.
- When it comes to artistic expression, the rules of language should be able to bend to fit the artist's intentions.
- Language "pros" are not the best music/lyrics critics.
- This is my personal opinion and I'll bet that several of my colleagues would disagree with me.
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Hi Jameseastt,
Welcome to the forums!
Nice lyrics.
When it comes to artistic expression, the rules of language should be able to bend to fit the artist's intentions. Language "pros" are not the best music/lyrics critics. This is my personal opinion and I'll bet that several
Welcome to the forums!
Nice lyrics.
When it comes to artistic expression, the rules of language should be able to bend to fit the artist's intentions. Language "pros" are not the best music/lyrics critics. This is my personal opinion and I'll bet that several
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Thanks a lot, John! I really appreciate your correction.
"If that's the case, it's still the same" is definitely better! =)
"they" was a typo. Where was I looking ?.....=))
That was my first lyrics ever. Not only in English, but in my native language also.=))
"If that's the case, it's still the same" is definitely better! =)
"they" was a typo. Where was I looking ?.....=))
That was my first lyrics ever. Not only in English, but in my native language also.=))
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Glad to have been of help.
If this is your first attempt, you should get to know people in the music business.....F A S T !
Good luck, John
If this is your first attempt, you should get to know people in the music business.....F A S T !
Good luck, John
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