Something is wrong with "WE" BM

0 Hi there, i was wondering can anyone tell me what to change in my essay 02br
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01font00My orginal before my teacher tell my to change this02font02br
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00 We live in a society where everyone needs to write in order to make a living; whether it is for school, college, job or even writing for fun. writing allow us to express who we are as a person. Writing also allows us to see if we understand the reading material or not. to be honest, every time I hear the word, "writng" it send a chill down my spine, because i would dread that word for many years. Therefore, my writing style is my weakness in my life. 02br
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01font00 This is what i got back from my teacher, she highlight the word i must change. can anyone tell me to change to which word. for ex. do i change we to people.02font02br
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01b00We02b00 live in a society where everyone needs to write in order to make a living; whether it is for school, college, 01b00job02b00 or even 01b00writing02b00 for fun. writing allow 01b00us 02b00to express who 01b00we02b00 are as a 01b00person02b00. Writing also allows 01b00us02b00 to see if 01b00we02b00 understand the reading material or not. to be honest, every time I hear the word, "writng" 01b00it send02b00 a chill down my spine01b00,02b00 because i would 01b00?02b00dread that word for many years. Therefore, my writing style is my weakness in my life. 0-