Someone, help for Grammar Fix

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0Hi English Gurus, would appreciate if someone could lend a hand on checking my grammar mistakes and fix my English sentences for the letter below. Thanks02br02br01span00Dear Gary,02br02br00Sorry, I have forgotten to put down my personal email for your reference before I left the office. This will be the email that I frequently update: 01b01a00Email Removed00"&gt;01span00Email Removed02span02a02b00. You can drop me an email at anytime.02span01span02br02br02span00 01span02br00A friendly note to inform that that I am no longer attached with my previous company after this contract has ended due to certain reasons; and currently I am waiting for your respond for making a come back to join my lovely team.02span01span02br02br02span01span02br00If you lend a hand in negotiation my charges to be pushed up to RM 500 per day, in this case I will assure you to further pursue my BW Certification at my own expense without the need of BAT subsidizing. By doing so, it will bring further benefits of having a strong technical person in your support team to serve the team for betterment and also for the organization.02span02br02br01span00To accelerate the process, I will proceed to the registration center tomorrow for my company’s registration & will pass to directly Gaya once your side has been settled. 02br02br02span01span00I understand it will take for a while for BAT to process in order to settle my agreement. For all that said, I really want to thank you again for your time & your helping hand. I do appreciate it and I am looking forward to hearing from your good news!02span00 01span00 02span01span02br02br00Regards,02span02br01span00Vincent02span0-

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0A few suggestions, but some parts aren't very clear to me...02br
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01i00Dear Gary,02br
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00Sorry, I 01del~~00have forgotten to put down02del~~00 02i01b01i00forgot to leave02i00 02b01i00my personal email 01b00address02b00 for your reference before I left the office. 01del~~00This will be the email that I frequently update02del~~00 01b00The address that I check most frequently is02b00 01b01a00Email Removed00">01font01span00Email Removed02span02font02a02b00. You can drop me an email at 01del~~00anytime02del~~01b00 any time02b00.02i02br
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01i00A friendly note to inform 01del~~00that02del~~01b00 you 02b00that I am no longer attached 01del~~00with02del~~00 01b00to02b00 my previous company 01del~~00after this contract has ended due to certain reasons02del~~01b00 now that (for various reasons)02b00 01b00my contract has ended, 02b01del~~00and currently I am waiting for your respond for making a come back to join my lovely team02del~~01b00 and that I am currently awaiting your response to my offer to come back and rejoin my lovely team!02b02i02br
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00"Lovely team" is appropriate only if you're on very chatty and familiar terms with the recipient. 02br
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00Actually, what I wrote may not make much sense. If you're waiting for his (i.e. Gary's) response to your request to have (as I understand it) your old job back, then presumably you've already contacted him about the situation and don't need to "inform" him? Or did you mean "remind" rather than "inform"? In fact, I'm thoroughly confused about what's going on (largely because I don't have the necessary background knowledge, rather than because your letter is particularly confusing in itself). I don't understand the relationship between the company whose office you just left, BAT, the company you call "my previous company", and the company you later call "my company". I don't understand which of these are different and which (if any) are the same, or who Gary is and how he fits into this setup. So, some of my suggestions may not be appropriate!02br
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01i00If you lend a hand in 01del~~00negotiation02del~~00 01b00negotiating02b00 my charges 01del~~00to be pushed02del~~00 up to RM 500 per day, 01del~~00in this case02del~~00 I will 01del~~00assure you to further pursue02del~~00 01b00commit to pursuing02b00 my BW Certification at my own expense without the need 01del~~00of02del~~00 01b00for02b00 BAT 01del~~00subsidizing02del~~00 01b00to subsidize it02b00. 01del~~00By doing so, it02del~~00 01b00This 02b00will bring 01b00you the 02b00further 01del~~00benefits of having02del~~00 01b00benefit of02b00 a strong technical person in your support team 01del~~00to serve the team for betterment and also for the organization02del~~00.02i02br
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01i00To accelerate the process, I will 01del~~00proceed02del~~00 01b00go02b00 to the registration center tomorrow 01del~~00for02del~~00 01b00to arrange02b00 my company’s registration, 01del~~00&02del~~00 01b00and I 02b00will pass 01del~~00to directly Gaya02del~~00 01b00this directly to Gaya02b00 once your side has been settled. 02br
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00I understand it will take for a while for BAT to 01del~~00process in order to settle my agreement02del~~01b00 agree and process my contract [??]02b00. 01del~~00For all that said,02del~~00 I really want to thank you again for your time 01del~~00&02del~~00 01b00and02b00 your 01del~~00helping hand02del~~01b00 help02b00. I do appreciate it01b00,02b00 and I am looking forward to hearing 01del~~00from your good news02del~~00 01b00some good news from you02b00!00 00 02i0-

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