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Lo2 Posted 16 years ago
Essay & Composition Writing

Some sentences

Hi there again

I have some sentences that I would like you to take a look at:

I am out shopping I often go to a café with my friends. I earn a little money for this, by cleaning the stairs where I live.

We usually spend the winter holiday in Sweden, we travel with my uncle and aunt and my two cousins, with whom we rent a house.

Every year I spend a week with my grandmother, aunt and cousins in the summer house, during that week we go to the beach and have fun. 

I am very fond of animals and very interested in animals especially mammals, which I think are very fascinating.

I practice MTV-dance and go swimming in my free time.

I love films both real films and animated films, such as Disney and Pixar, a mutual interest that me and my father share.

Which are always hot and freshly baked, when you buy them at the baker.  

Hope that you are going to help me!
  

Top answer

When I am out shopping I often go to a café with my friends. ] by cleaning the stairs where I live. We usually spend the winter holiday in Sweden .

— Deborah_d

  • When I am out shopping I often go to a café with my friends.
  • ] by cleaning the stairs where I live.
  • We usually spend the winter holiday in Sweden .
  • W e travel with my uncle and aunt and my two cousins, with whom we rent a house.
  • Every year I spend a week with my grandmother, aunt and cousins in the summer house .
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When I am out shopping I often go to a café with my friends. I earn a little money ["to spend" may be better?] by cleaning the stairs where I live.

We usually spend the winter holiday in Sweden. We travel with my uncle and aunt and my two cousins, with whom we rent a house.

Every year I spend a week with my grandmother, aunt and cousins in the summer hou
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Once again thank you very much Emotion: smile

I have two follow up questions:

What do you mean by "spend" in the first sentence?
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It's just not totally clear what 'this' is in the sentence, so I thought I'd make it a bit clearer by saying 'to spend', but your version is ok too.

'Baker' is ok, but in UK English we'd usually say 'the bakers' or 'the baker's' - I guess it's short for 'baker's shop'.
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there are too many 'i' ...

I am very fond of animals...

I practice MTV-dance and ...

I love films both real films ...
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