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Jennieee Posted 5 years ago
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Some people argue that it is more important to have an enjoyable job than to earn a lot of money. Others disagree and think that a good salary leads to a better life

Because an enjoyable job promotes satisfaction and arouses motivation, an enjoyable job may take years to achieve success, and during this process, this may not provide enough money for a stable life. Most people acknowledge that money plays a vital role in every family because money resolves most of our financial concerns in life, like meeting all basic human needs, owning a house, a car or raising children. On this account, an employee is unlikely to feel any happiness at work when considering the subsistence wage on which his needy family is living". Moreover', a high salary will provide enough money to fall back on whenever there are illnesses or emergencies, Take the COVID-19 pandemic as an example: the city-wide lockdown has burdened the economy; consequently, thousands of low-wage workers had no choice but to live from hand to mouth. In these situations, it is undeniable that a good income will secure your family life both physically and mentally. Given that' a job providing a decent salary is very demanding and that the toxic work environment is also unbearable, the only thing that matters is our life, especially the life with family, so use this well-paid job as a means to support it. Therefore, when saving up enough money, people can take early retirement to spend time with families or pursue their enjoyable jobs.

  

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