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Hooldus Posted 18 years ago
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Hi guys! Can anybody correct my small article? Thank you in advance.

According to Wikipedia there are more than 1.556 animal species that are currently at risk of becoming extinct. Is it in our power to somehow change this situation? Can we protect them from further extinction?

My answer to this question is: “Yes, we can”. I think we are all responsible for those animals that could become extinct because of us. In order to reduce this risk we should administer harsher punishment to those people, who didn’t respect the nature and harm it. Also, we should give people more information about the relevance and urgency of this problem and constantly educate them in order to refresh their knowledge.

Unfortunately, in reality these penal and educational processes are very slow and it will last many decades before we will see result. But the good news is that we can start saving endangered animals today. From biology lessons in the school I got to know about DNA – the encoded information about all cells in the alive organism. On Discovery Channel I saw that the work on saving animal’s DNA has been already started and in the near future it will be possible to clone and recreate extinct species.

To sum things up I would like to add that it’s very important to start thinking about these problems today, because tomorrow it may be already too late.
  

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Hello, hooldus-- and welcome to English Forums. Your essay is pretty good. I have made a few corrections: According to Wikipedia , there are more than 1 , 556 animal species that are currently at risk of becoming extinct.

  • Hello, hooldus-- and welcome to English Forums.
  • Your essay is pretty good.
  • I have made a few corrections: According to Wikipedia , there are more than 1 , 556 animal species that are currently at risk of becoming extinct.
  • Is it in our power to somehow change this situation?
  • Can we protect them from extinction ?
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Hello, hooldus-- and welcome to English Forums. Your essay is pretty good. I have made a few corrections:

According to Wikipedia, there are more than 1,556 animal species that are currently at risk of becoming extinct. Is it in our power to somehow change this situation? Can we protect them from extinction?

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Mister Micawber, thank you very much[Y]! Now my essay looks much better.

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