Simple task 1 for the beginner

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Hello teacher, I have written a simple essay related to task 1 in the IELTS test. Please help me to check and correct it. Thank you with love.

The graph below shows relative price changes for fresh fruits and vegetables, sugars and sweets, and carbonated drinks between 1978 and 2009. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

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The line graph gives general information about the changes in price of three different food groups in a 30-year-period, from 1979 to 2009.

Overall, all of the food groups increased at the same starting point in 1979, approximately 60, despite the variation. Standing out of other groups, only the increase in price of fresh fruits and vegetables was significantly higher than the rise in the general consumer-price index. Both of the remained groups were below the index of consumer price.

Over the period, the consumer-price index steadily rose from the starting point to around 210 in the year of 2009. The price for sugar and sweets showed the similar trend and reached exactly 200 in 2009 after fluctuation, which was higher than the value of carbonated drinks at slightly above 150. On the other hand, fresh fruits and vegetables showed the different trend when giving the particularly huge conjunction after 1989 and strongly varied in the remainder period. In the year 2009, the price in this kind of food group archived around 330.

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The line graph gives general information (That is not good. It does not give general information. It plots very specific values. What is on the graph?) about the changes in price of three different food groups (What are these groups? You forgot to mention the consumer price index, too.) in a 30-year-period, from 1979 to 2009.

To do this essay properly, you have to understand how indexing, and the consumer price index (CPI) works. The CPI measures the general cost of living. If it goes up, it shows "inflation." If it goes down (rarely), the economy is in deflation.

The CPI includes everything - housing, transportation, food, health care, and other goods and services.

Other indices, such as for carbonated drinks, fruit and vegetables, transportation and housing, show how the relative costs of these items compares with the overall cost of living.

All the indices, including the CPI, are normalized at one point in time at a value of 100. You can see this point at 1983 on the graph. Every index has a value of 100. The indices measure relative, not absolute price changes.

For example, the CPI was 100 in 1983 and 200 in 2007. This means that the cost of living had doubled over that time period, or risen 100%. That is an inflation rate of 100% / 24 years or about 4% per year.

Note that the inflation rate was higher from 1979-1983, a 40% change over 4 years or about 10% per year.

Overall, all of the food groups increased at from the same starting point in 1979, (Actually that is not correct. They are all slightly different from 60. in 1979. The normalization point is January 1983 at 100. In 1979 you could buy goods worth $100 in 1983 for about $60. ) approximately 60, ~~despite the variation.~~ Standing out from the of other groups, ~~only~~ the increase in price of fresh fruits and vegetables was significantly higher than the rise in the general consumer-price index. Both of the remained (wrong form. You have not told the reader what these other groups are.) groups were below the index of consumer price. (Wrong. You cannot change the name of a vital statistic. Its name is "consumer price index". You can use its common abbreviation "CPI."

Since there is a trend line, you can use the word "fluctuation" for the index of fresh fruits and vegetables. Prices of these items have a random fluctuation with respect to the trend line.

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Over the period, the consumer-price index steadily rose from the starting point to around 210 in the year of 2009. The prices for sugar and sweets showed a ~~the~~ similar trend and reached exactly 200 in 2009 ~~after fluctuation~~, which was higher than ~~the value of~~ the index for carbonated drinks at slightly above 150. On the other hand, fresh fruits and vegetables showed a ~~the~~ different trend (That is not correct. The trend of all indices is the same: upwards. The rate of increase is different, however. Fruits and Vegetables increased from 100 to 300 in 23 years. That is an increase of 200%, or about 8.7% per year. That is more than double the inflation rate of 4% as measured by the CPI.) when giving the particularly huge conjunction (wrong expression. Conjunction is an astronomical term. "Huge" is too emotional for a math/science essay. ) after 1989 and strongly varied in the remainder period. In the year 2009, the price in this kind of food group archived (wrong word) around 330.

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