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Nicky lo Posted 11 years ago
Essay & Composition Writing
silly thought(i am not good at English,but i try to write because i want to improve my writing skill)
the first rule The First rule of fight club is, you do not talk about fight club
The second rule of fight club is, you do not talk about fight club
If someone says stop, goes limp tags out the fight is over
Two guys to a fight
One fight at a time
No shirts No shoes
Fights will go on as long as they have to
If this is your first night at fight club you have to fight
I watched the Fight Club occasionally, huh, ok, I am bored and I was supposed to do something enrich my boring day, so I found some books which from best seller books list, the another way to make myself more busier is to watch as much movies as I can everyday. And I turn to IMDB where I can watch many outstanding quality movies.
Actually I watched some of them before, but I don’t understand because I am too young to understand the comprehension and what movies express.
Let’s go to the point, the movie is so amazing and brilliant, I mean, director, actors, actress and people behind-the-scenes.
Many and many people said in this brand new and sensitive age, the youth like us are always making ambitious and discontent fulfill our body, we are rebel against the nowadays’ society, the world, and everything related to our own density. We don’t want to live a normal but bored life, to work like a well-behaved child as our parents expected, what on earth can represent us who we actually are expect our suit and tie, our position, how much money we earn, how much money on our accounts? If not, what we really going to do?
Most of us can’t come up with a proper answer, even just a answer.
By the end of the story, Jack shot himself to stop Taylor from destroying everything, the other Jack, seeing the buildings collapsed holding Marla’s hand. It is not until he met Marla again did he realize how much he love her and know himself clearly that he is Taylor and Taylor is Jack. He started to realize the world and what it really is.
Just like the warning this movie presented: start a fight, prove you are alive, if you don’t want to claim your humanity you will become a statistic….
The second rule of fight club is, you do not talk about fight club
If someone says stop, goes limp tags out the fight is over
Two guys to a fight
One fight at a time
No shirts No shoes
Fights will go on as long as they have to
If this is your first night at fight club you have to fight
I watched the Fight Club occasionally, huh, ok, I am bored and I was supposed to do something enrich my boring day, so I found some books which from best seller books list, the another way to make myself more busier is to watch as much movies as I can everyday. And I turn to IMDB where I can watch many outstanding quality movies.
Actually I watched some of them before, but I don’t understand because I am too young to understand the comprehension and what movies express.
Let’s go to the point, the movie is so amazing and brilliant, I mean, director, actors, actress and people behind-the-scenes.
Many and many people said in this brand new and sensitive age, the youth like us are always making ambitious and discontent fulfill our body, we are rebel against the nowadays’ society, the world, and everything related to our own density. We don’t want to live a normal but bored life, to work like a well-behaved child as our parents expected, what on earth can represent us who we actually are expect our suit and tie, our position, how much money we earn, how much money on our accounts? If not, what we really going to do?
Most of us can’t come up with a proper answer, even just a answer.
By the end of the story, Jack shot himself to stop Taylor from destroying everything, the other Jack, seeing the buildings collapsed holding Marla’s hand. It is not until he met Marla again did he realize how much he love her and know himself clearly that he is Taylor and Taylor is Jack. He started to realize the world and what it really is.
Just like the warning this movie presented: start a fight, prove you are alive, if you don’t want to claim your humanity you will become a statistic….
Top answer
You need to work on punctuation. You need to avoid making run-on sentences. I highlighted some of the mistakes, and corrected some, too.
- You need to work on punctuation.
- You need to avoid making run-on sentences.
- I highlighted some of the mistakes, and corrected some, too.
- t he fi rst r ule The First rule of the fight club is , you do not talk about the fight clu b The second rule of the fight club is , you do not talk about the fight clu b If someone says stop, goes limp and tags ou t the fight is ove r Two guys to a fight One fight at a time No shirts No shoes Fights will go on as long as they have to If this is your first night at fight club you have to figh t I watched the Fight Club occasionally, (comma splice) huh, ok, I am bored and I was supposed to do something to enrich my boring day, so I found some books which from the best seller books list, (comma splice) the another way to make myself more busier is to watch as much movies as I can everyday .
- And I turn to IMDB where I can watch many outstanding quality movies.
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You need to work on punctuation. You need to avoid making run-on sentences. I highlighted some of the mistakes, and corrected some, too.
the first rule The First rule of the fight club is, you do
the first rule The First rule of the fight club is, you do
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nicky loThanks alot!!!!!Thanks a lot!!!!!
You don't need so many exclamation marks.
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