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Xmagedo Posted 15 years ago
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Sicientist essay rewrite, 2 !

Scientific inquiry is rooted in the desire to discover, but there is no discovery so important that in its pursuit a threat to human life can be tolerated.
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Scientists discoveries are playing important role to make healthy, natural and technology advancements in our society, but not important that the threat of human life caused.

Some research does not involve humans, like making new computers or inventing softwares. But in World War 2, what Nazis did to prisoners was wrong, they did many experiments on humans without anyone willingly volunteer, in which resulted in people's death and permanent disability, they considered human as Guinea Pig .

On the other hand, I believe there are situations in which a humans experiment might be tolerated. As an example, patient who is suffering from terminal disease such as Aids, might be applied in experiments. Drugs that use in animals in laboratory to cure them no knows if it will work on patient hosptial bed, why not using it on human who is suffering from Aids or cancer, the patient will die anyway ?

I do believe experiments that put human's life at risk can not be tolerated, if a human is suffering from deadly disease, at this point experiment can be tolerated.

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Pleas, in this thread tell what are my mistakes ?
Thanks ahead,
Abdul
  

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xmagedo - Please write simple sentences, and write them correctly first (Subject - verb - object). You are trying to write sentences that are much too complicated. As a result, you make many mistakes.

  • xmagedo - Please write simple sentences, and write them correctly first (Subject - verb - object).
  • You are trying to write sentences that are much too complicated.
  • As a result, you make many mistakes.
  • Scientists (Either use the possessive: scientists', or the adjective: scientific) discoveries are playing an important role in making to make healthy, natural and technology advancements in our society, but none are not important enough to cause that the threat s to of human life caused .
  • Some research does not involve human subject s, like making new computers or writing inventing software s .
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xmagedo - Please write simple sentences, and write them correctly first (Subject - verb - object). You are trying to write sentences that are much too complicated. As a result, you make many mistakes.

Scientists (Either use the possessive: scientists', or the adjective: scientific)discoveries are playing an important role in making to make healthy, natural
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You are right!
I always try to use very attractive sentence, then I end up making it so complicated. When I read articles in news papers I get inspired on how the writer describe the events, so I am just trying to be like one of those.
If you have a good advice on how to write very attractive and detailed sentence, then help me !










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Here is the final edited on science essay, this time I tried to use easy sentences as you mentioned, pleas have a look !
Thank for your corporation. You are really great.
Wish you all the best in your life
Abdul
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The general meaning of scientific is to discover new things that help in making natural, technolo
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You are right! I always try to write use very attractive sentences; then I end up making them too it so complicated. When I read articles in newspapers, news papers I get inspired by on how the writer describes the events, so I am just trying to be like one of those.
If you have some
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The general meaning of scientific (you need a noun here. Scientific is an adjective.) is to discover new things that help in making natural, technology ( you need an adjective here. Technology is a noun.) and healthy advancements in of the society. The statement above claims that scientific discoveries are very important, but not important e
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Thanks,
Wish you all the best.
Abdul

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