Show vs Tell
I need help please. I usually write technical or step-by-step. I am now trying to write a nonfiction article however in a ‘showing’ manner like as in a novel type of book.
Two similar paragraphs below, would you give me your two cents worth please. Thank you!
After reading over one hundred and seventy research documents, congress reports and university papers my head was throbbing and my heart was saddened. I had to give my eyes and heart a rest by walking away from this subject matter for a few days.
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My eyes were red and dry from reading over one hundred and seventy research documents, congress reports and university papers that at the end of a few weeks, the dull throb in my head and my heart was so saddened, I had to walk away from this subject matter for a few days
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The first paragraph is written without many errors while the second one has a few. I would incorporate the new information, vocabulary, from the second into the first. If I have to pick one over the other, the first is better.
- The first paragraph is written without many errors while the second one has a few.
- I would incorporate the new information, vocabulary, from the second into the first.
- If I have to pick one over the other, the first is better.
- But I think you should combine them.
- Be sure not to be repetitious in your efforts to combine them.
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The first paragraph is written without many errors while the second one has a few. I would incorporate the new information, vocabulary, from the second into the first. If I have to pick one over the other, the first is better. But I think you should combine them. Be sure not to be repetitious in your efforts to combine them. Let us see what you come up with.
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