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Islander Posted 19 years ago
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00X is our high-quality wine with many awards and recognitions. In our restaurant you can enjoy in variety of X specialities and home-made food and drink as well as home-grown fruit and vegetables. Here, you can also buy original souvenirs from famous X stone, for which author, XY, has received recognition for originality by X association. Welcome!02br
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0 X is our high-quality wine with many awards and recognitions. In our restaurant you can enjoy (a) variety of X specialities and home-made food and drink as well as home-grown fruit and vegetables. is better, however I dislike the duplication of "for" in the second sentence.

— Eimai_Anglos

  • 0 X is our high-quality wine with many awards and recognitions.
  • In our restaurant you can enjoy (a) variety of X specialities and home-made food and drink as well as home-grown fruit and vegetables.
  • is better, however I dislike the duplication of "for" in the second sentence.
  • In any case, the sentences are too long.
  • If this were a real advertisement, the reader would be lost/bored before reaching the end!
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0 X is our high-quality wine with many awards and recognitions. In our restaurant you can enjoy (a) variety of X specialities and home-made food and drink as well as home-grown fruit and vegetables. Here, you can also buy original souvenirs (made?) from (the?) famous X stone, for which author, XY, has received recognition for originality by X association.02br
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0 Many thanks Eimai_Anglos. I agree with your comment. How would you write this. 0-
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0 You will only have an author if the souvenirs are written material. Depending on what the souvenirs are, you may prefer to use artist, craftsman, sculptor, designer etc. 0-
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0 You will have an author only if the souvenirs are written material. Dependent on what the souvenirs are, you may prefer to use: artist, craftsman, sculptor, designer etc. 0-
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0I'll try not to take offence at your suggested correction. My original post sounds perfectly acceptable to 01i01b00my02b02i00 native British ears!0-
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0 Thank you. Could you please also check this:02br
00Our guests have 10% discount in family restaurant and 30% discount in rent-a-boat. Apartment X has no Sat-TV.Stay up to 3 days is +30%. 0-
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0 Does it sound better if i make two sentences from the last one: 02br
00Here you can also buy original artworks made from the famous X stone. For these artworks, designer XY has received recognition for originality by X association. 0-
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