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Anonymous Posted 13 years ago
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Short-term help needed with writing a motivation letter for a PhD position
Hello. I am a Master student in International Law and a graduate in European Law. Yesterday I found out about a PhD position for which I would like to apply. In order to apply I must write a motivation letter. However, the deadline is today and there is nobody who can help me to revise my motivation letter. I therefore turn to all of you and would kindly like to ask you for help. I would be eternally grateful for anyone who can devote some of his or hers precious time to help me!
Below is the current draft of my letter. I realize that this version needs a lot of improvement and I am not asking anyone to write a motivation letter for me. However, I would sincerely appreciate any feedback, suggestions and other forms of help as I really want to obtain this position.
Dear dr. XXX,
I am writing to express my great interest in applying for the PhD position at the Faculty of Law, University of XXX, for the project on Marital Captivity and Human Rights. I am a MA European Law School graduate and a motivated student of the Human Rights Track of the Master Globalization and Law at the University of XXX, expected to graduate in October 2013. With my educational background and a research interest in the area of the human rights of women , I strongly believe my work can contribute to improving the position of women with regard to marital rights.
Throughout the course of my education I have developed a special interest for the role of the rule of law in multicultural societies, where social issues constantly call for new solutions. My aim is to be part of a meaningful research project that can contribute to solving problems of contemporary societies through the use of legal instruments. During the Globalization and Law Master I developed a special interest for the human rights of women, which led me to writing my thesis about the status of the human rights of women in Afghanistan. In this work I examined the inherent tensions between sharia-based family law and women’s human rights in Afghanistan. In particular, I addressed a state’s obligation under international human rights law to take measures to eliminate violence and discrimination against women. It is my dream to continue conducting research on the gap between religious practices and women’s human rights in order to contribute to a better understanding of the methods that can reduce gender inequalities.
Beyond my research experience in the field of women’s human rights I have been fortunate to gain good knowledge of other areas of law at the University of Maastricht. In particular, I have gained insight in migration law through the course Migration and Citizenship Law, which was graded with a nine. I am very interested in Dutch Migration and Aliens law as well and have written my thesis of the European Law School Master about the compatibility of the Dutch family reunification rules with European migration law. This work was graded with a nine and evidences my good research and academic skills.
In 2012 I obtained an internship position at the Dutch Ministry of Economic Affairs. My main task was examining relevant European Union legal provisions and their scope of application and pursuing Dutch governmental institutions to adhere to these obligations, thereby securing the rights of citizens. My ability to conduct individual research, while being part of a team has been highly appreciated by my supervisor in his internship report.
Thank you for considering my application.
Yours sincerely,
XXX
Below is the current draft of my letter. I realize that this version needs a lot of improvement and I am not asking anyone to write a motivation letter for me. However, I would sincerely appreciate any feedback, suggestions and other forms of help as I really want to obtain this position.
Dear dr. XXX,
I am writing to express my great interest in applying for the PhD position at the Faculty of Law, University of XXX, for the project on Marital Captivity and Human Rights. I am a MA European Law School graduate and a motivated student of the Human Rights Track of the Master Globalization and Law at the University of XXX, expected to graduate in October 2013. With my educational background and a research interest in the area of the human rights of women , I strongly believe my work can contribute to improving the position of women with regard to marital rights.
Throughout the course of my education I have developed a special interest for the role of the rule of law in multicultural societies, where social issues constantly call for new solutions. My aim is to be part of a meaningful research project that can contribute to solving problems of contemporary societies through the use of legal instruments. During the Globalization and Law Master I developed a special interest for the human rights of women, which led me to writing my thesis about the status of the human rights of women in Afghanistan. In this work I examined the inherent tensions between sharia-based family law and women’s human rights in Afghanistan. In particular, I addressed a state’s obligation under international human rights law to take measures to eliminate violence and discrimination against women. It is my dream to continue conducting research on the gap between religious practices and women’s human rights in order to contribute to a better understanding of the methods that can reduce gender inequalities.
Beyond my research experience in the field of women’s human rights I have been fortunate to gain good knowledge of other areas of law at the University of Maastricht. In particular, I have gained insight in migration law through the course Migration and Citizenship Law, which was graded with a nine. I am very interested in Dutch Migration and Aliens law as well and have written my thesis of the European Law School Master about the compatibility of the Dutch family reunification rules with European migration law. This work was graded with a nine and evidences my good research and academic skills.
In 2012 I obtained an internship position at the Dutch Ministry of Economic Affairs. My main task was examining relevant European Union legal provisions and their scope of application and pursuing Dutch governmental institutions to adhere to these obligations, thereby securing the rights of citizens. My ability to conduct individual research, while being part of a team has been highly appreciated by my supervisor in his internship report.
Thank you for considering my application.
Yours sincerely,
XXX
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I have already improved the letter myself, see the new version below. If anyone has any comments, please let me know. Dear Dr.
- I have already improved the letter myself, see the new version below.
- If anyone has any comments, please let me know.
- Dear Dr.
- ***, I am writing you to express my great interest in the PhD position at the Law Faculty of *** University.
- The project on Marital Captivity and Human Rights fascinates me because I strongly believe that denying a woman the right to divorce is a grave violation of her fundamental human rights and should be illegal.
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I have already improved the letter myself, see the new version below. If anyone has any comments, please let me know.
Dear Dr. ***,
I am writing you to express my great interest in the PhD position at the Law Faculty of *** University. The project on Marital Captivity and Human Rights fascinates me because I strongly believe that denying a woman the right to divorce is a grave violati
Dear Dr. ***,
I am writing you to express my great interest in the PhD position at the Law Faculty of *** University. The project on Marital Captivity and Human Rights fascinates me because I strongly believe that denying a woman the right to divorce is a grave violati
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I am writing you to express my great interest in the PhD position at the Law Faculty of *** University. The project on Marital Captivity and Human Rights fascinates me, because I strongly believe that denying a woman the right to divorce is a grave violation of her fundamental human rights, and should be illegal.
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I am not a university professor, so I really can't speak with any authority on what they like and dislike in a motivation letter. Your letter is clear and to the point, which I'm sure is good. I do read some of the motivation letters posted here, and I note that they usually go into more detail about work experience, volunteer work, sporting achievements etc. than you have. Whether including this
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Here's a post containing advice on motivation letters: http://www.EnglishForward.com/English/HowWriteMotivationCover-Letter/bzlmn/post.htm
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