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Yoong Liat Posted 19 years ago
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short story

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00Below is another short story meant for first-year students. Please edit it for me. Many thanks in advance.02br
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00Once there was a cat. The mice, which live in the same house.feared it. They were afraid of being eaten by it.00 02br
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00One day, they had a meeting to find out how to be able to hear the cat when it was coming. One of the mice suggested, “Let’s tie a bell round the cat’s neck so that when it is moving, we can hear it.” All the mice except one thought that it was a good idea. They were very happy that they had finally found a way to deal with the cat.02br
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00A short while later, one of the mice asked, “Who will put the bell round the cat’s neck. I myself dare not go near the cat?" Suddenly there was silence. They agreed that none of them was able to do it.02br
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00Soon the meeting was over. They continued to live in fear of the cat. 02br
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0Hi, 02br 02br 00I suggest you fix this sentence. Hope this helps. 01blockquote 01cite 10Yoong Liat12cite 12br 12br 10Hi guys12br 12br 10Once there was a cat.

— Julielai

  • 0Hi, 02br 02br 00I suggest you fix this sentence.
  • Hope this helps.
  • 01blockquote 01cite 10Yoong Liat12cite 12br 12br 10Hi guys12br 12br 10Once there was a cat.
  • 12b 10feared it.
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0Hi, 02br
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00I suggest you fix this sentence. Hope this helps. 01blockquote
01cite10Yoong Liat12cite12br
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10Hi guys12br
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10Once there was a cat. The mice, which 11b10live (tense)12b10 in the same house11b10.12b10feared it. 12br
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0Hi Ju01b01font00lielai02font02b02br
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00Thanks for your suggestions, especially in pointing out the error in tense.02br
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00So the other sentences are okay, I assume.02br
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00I'll have a couple of such short compositions which I will post soon. I hope that you'll help me
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10Below is another short story meant for first-year students. Please edit it for me. Many thanks in advance.12br
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10Once there was a cat. The mice, which live11font10d12font10 in the same hous1
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0 Hi 01b01font00Feebs1102font02b02br
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00Oh dear! You've spotted a missing question mark after 'neck'. How careless of me! Thanks for doing a fine job.02br
01b00One question for you02b00: All the mice except one thought that 01font00this02font00
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0 Really only stylistically - you have "it" in the previous sentence, and changing the word avoids repetition.0-
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01cite10Feebs1112cite10Really only stylistically - you have "it" in the previous sentence, and changing the word avoids repetition.12br
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10Logical explanation. Thanks.0-
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