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Fizzi Posted 17 years ago
Essay & Composition Writing

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Hi all,

How is my English?

X states that it approves and rejects promotion relating to vitamins.

Regards,

Fizzi
  

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Hi Fizzi, X states that it approves and rejects promotions relating to vitamins. I assume X is some kind of regulatory body. 'Relating to vitamins' seems loosely worded to me.

— Clive

  • Hi Fizzi, X states that it approves and rejects promotions relating to vitamins.
  • I assume X is some kind of regulatory body.
  • 'Relating to vitamins' seems loosely worded to me.
  • 'X states that' suggests, to me, some caution on the part of the writer.
  • Compare 'X approves and rejects .
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Hi Fizzi,
X states that it approves and rejects promotions relating to vitamins.

I assume X is some kind of regulatory body.
'Relating to vitamins' seems loosely worded to me.

'X states that' suggests, to me, some caution on the part of the writer. Compare 'X approves and rejects . . '

How about these versions?

X (states that it) approves and rejects
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Dear Clive,

Thanks for the comments.

Regards,

FIzzi
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