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Is this okay:The moment you walk in you knew this place was no ordinary salon! The new interior was immaculate, the spacing was very well designed, and the natural lighting gives the entire place a comfortable environment.

CalifJim · Accepted Answer

anon006okay?

Yes, except for some unnecessary mixing of tenses.

anon006The moment you walk in you ~~knew~~ know this place ~~was~~ is no ordinary salon! The new interior ~~was~~ is immaculate, the spacing ~~was~~ is very well designed, and the natural lighting gives the entire place a comfortable environment.

As shown above, this is one possibility.

anon006The moment you walked in you knew this place was no ordinary salon! The new interior was immaculate, the spacing was very well designed, and the natural lighting ~~gives~~ gave the entire place a comfortable environment.

And this is another possibility.

You might also consider rephrasing "gives the ... place ... a comfortable environment". I don't think that's exactly what you want to say. Isn't is more like the lighting makes the place comfortable? Or the lighting creates a comfortable environment?

I ask you to think about this a little because a place is an environment, or always naturally has an environment, so it's strange to say that something "gives a place an environment".

CJ

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