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PLease proofread:Thank you!I did go to admissions about this, but nothing was done and I was simply neglected. They did not take me seriously and brushed me off like I wasn't even there. The saddest part was when I went to speak to my adviser about this, he simply told me that things like this happened and I should just take it! I was appalled after speaking to my adviser and decided that UOP was not the school or the environment I'd like to continue to stay in and decided to drop out. I do remember talking to you at your office about non-school related stuff and I think that was right in the midst of what had been happening to me, so I very subtly offered to have lunch or dinner w/ you. I wasn't prepared to directly come forth with such an ordeal to anybody, especially since my adviser had just told me that it was a miniscule issue and I best just take it!!

Clive · Accepted Answer

Hi,

If I received this, I would ask myself:
Why is she telling me all this?
What does she want me to do?

I did go to admissions about this, but nothing was done and I was simply neglected. They did not take me seriously and brushed me off like I wasn't even there. The saddest part was when I went to speak to my adviser about this, he simply told me that things like this happened and I should just take it! I was appalled after speaking to him and decided that UOP was not the school or the environment I'd like to continue to stay in. So, I decided to drop out. I do remember talking to you at your office about non-school related stuff and I think that was right in the midst of what had been happening to me, so I very subtly offered to have lunch or dinner with you. I wasn't prepared to directly come forth with such an ordeal to anybody, especially since my adviser had just told me that it was a miniscule issue and I best just take it!!

Clive

PreciousJones · Answer

CliveHi,If I received this, I would ask myself:Why is she telling me all this?What does she want me to do?I did go to admissions about this, but nothing was done and I was simply neglected. They did not take me seriously and brushed me off like I wasn't even there. The saddest part was when I went to speak to my adviser about this, he simply told me that things like this happened and I should just take it! I was appalled after speaking to him and decided that UOP was not the school or the environment I'd like to continue to stay in. So, I decided to drop out. I do remember talking to you at your office about non-school related stuff and I think that was right in the midst of what had been happening to me, so I very subtly offered to have lunch or dinner with you. I wasn't prepared to directly come forth with such an ordeal to anybody, especially since my adviser had just told me that it was a miniscule issue and I best just take it!!Clive

Thank you very much for taking the time to correct this paragraph for me. I think most of the time it's kind of confusing, because some of the context had been left out. A lot of my paragraphs are fragments from email conversations and many times things are left out, so it can cause confusion.

Thanks again!

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