Short paper. Revision is needed please and thank you

What I like about this lead: The lead in this article works nicely mainly because it followed all the general rules that are set for writing a lead. I like that it used short words, got right to the point, was not hard to understand, and set up the rest of the story. I understood that the lead was saying that Floyd Mayweather (who) was arrested (what) on Friday (when) after allegedly fighting with his ex- girlfriend (why).
What I did not like about this lead: There is not much wrong with this lead. However, it does fail to include that in addition to fighting with his ex, Mayweather also threaten to kill her. It also does not include why Mayweather "allegedly" committed this crime. That information is found in the middle of the article. Lastly, the lead does not give the name of Mayweather's ex girlfriend until the fourth or fifth paragraph, which I found to be odd.

Story #2: Saints to the White House
What I like about this lead: This lead succeeded in getting my attention because it used short words, included all the important information, did not use unnecessary words, and simply because it got straight to the point. The lead told me that the New Orleans Saints (who) visited President Obama ( what) on Monday (when) at the White House (where), and Obama congratulated them on winning the Superbowl (why).
What I did not like about this lead: Well, I think this is a good lead, but it used repetitions and the word choices are poor. The writer uses "this morning", "today, "2009 Super Bowl and "2009 season" in the same sentence. The writer had already established that it was the 2009 season and that President Obama welcomed the Saints this morning. It was not necessary for the writer to repeat this twice especially since it is only one sentence. Next, I believe that the lead should end after "the 2009 Super Bowl". After that phrase, the sentence does not make sense. "President Obama honors their victory in the 2009 Superbowl and 2009 season". This is very confusing; I first thought that the writer was saying that Obama was congratulating them on winning the Superbowl and one game during the 2009 season. Lastly, the writer made a grammar mistake. It should have been "honors" not "honor"
Story #3: Double- Decker bus crashes
What I like about this lead: Well, the lead does not use long sentences or complex words. The lead told me that a double- decker bus (who) crashed into a low railroad bridge (what) on Saturday (when) in Salina New York (where).
What I did not like about this lead: I did not like this lead at all because it did not provide enough information in the lead. It does not tell why the double- decker bus crashed. The lead needed to include why this bus crashed. It did grab my attention, but I got frustrated because I wanted to know why the bus crashed, which is told at the end of the article.