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Ellisa Posted 17 years ago
Essay & Composition Writing
Short letter
Hello teachers!
I wrote a short letter here.
Please check grammatical errors.
Thanks in advance!
Dear Da-yeon.
Hello I'm Jiyeon from Kyunghee University.
I was surprised to receive your letter. Thank you for your reply.
I'm happy to hear that you like English even though you are quite young. Hope you can build your ability of English as much as you like English. People call someone who want to be like as "a role model" and I'm happy to be your role model. It's great that you want to have many kinds of jobs! I hope you could be one of them in the future. I, for the moment, want to be an English teacher at a Junior high school but I need to put lots of effort to be that. I hope to meet you at a school as a teacher and a student. The weather is getting hot. Take care of your health.
Write me soon.
Bye~
I wrote a short letter here.
Please check grammatical errors.
Thanks in advance!
Dear Da-yeon.
Hello I'm Jiyeon from Kyunghee University.
I was surprised to receive your letter. Thank you for your reply.
I'm happy to hear that you like English even though you are quite young. Hope you can build your ability of English as much as you like English. People call someone who want to be like as "a role model" and I'm happy to be your role model. It's great that you want to have many kinds of jobs! I hope you could be one of them in the future. I, for the moment, want to be an English teacher at a Junior high school but I need to put lots of effort to be that. I hope to meet you at a school as a teacher and a student. The weather is getting hot. Take care of your health.
Write me soon.
Bye~
Top answer
Ellisa, Can you please clarify the main message you're trying to send in this letter? There seems to be a lot of topics you are trying to cover in a short letter and your main message isn't too clear. If you can tell us the purpose of this letter, it might be easier for others to correct it.
- Ellisa, Can you please clarify the main message you're trying to send in this letter?
- There seems to be a lot of topics you are trying to cover in a short letter and your main message isn't too clear.
- If you can tell us the purpose of this letter, it might be easier for others to correct it.
- Fariha.
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Ellisa,
Can you please clarify the main message you're trying to send in this letter? There seems to be a lot of topics you are trying to cover in a short letter and your main message isn't too clear. If you can tell us the purpose of this letter, it might be easier for others to correct it.
Can you please clarify the main message you're trying to send in this letter? There seems to be a lot of topics you are trying to cover in a short letter and your main message isn't too clear. If you can tell us the purpose of this letter, it might be easier for others to correct it.
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