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Lucus Ong Posted 16 years ago
Essay & Composition Writing
Short diary
I wrote this diary just now.
I do not know whether it is correct or not.
Can anyone of you correct it for me?
Thank You so Much.
15 Nov 2010
Today, I told my friend about my injured knee thing, including my giving up of curing them just because it would takes about 6 months to cure them with accepting traditional Chinese medicine. Then, he said something very incredible which I never thought of. He said that I should treat it as an investment even it took 6 months to cure them. It is because I would/will be able to move faster after curing them, then I could/can earn back the time. The second reason he supported me to do so is that, after 25 years old, it would be very difficult for me to treat my knees due to metabolism decline. The third reason is that spending 6 months to earn happiness for one-life time is/was really worthwhile. The last reason that he supported me to do so is that I would end up with troubles, if I did not want to cure them.
Those are really good pieces of advice. I think I should include curing knees in my next year planning.
I do not know whether it is correct or not.
Can anyone of you correct it for me?
Thank You so Much.
15 Nov 2010
Today, I told my friend about my injured knee thing, including my giving up of curing them just because it would takes about 6 months to cure them with accepting traditional Chinese medicine. Then, he said something very incredible which I never thought of. He said that I should treat it as an investment even it took 6 months to cure them. It is because I would/will be able to move faster after curing them, then I could/can earn back the time. The second reason he supported me to do so is that, after 25 years old, it would be very difficult for me to treat my knees due to metabolism decline. The third reason is that spending 6 months to earn happiness for one-life time is/was really worthwhile. The last reason that he supported me to do so is that I would end up with troubles, if I did not want to cure them.
Those are really good pieces of advice. I think I should include curing knees in my next year planning.
Top answer
You mention only one knee in the first sentence, but it seems by the rest of the entry that you are referring to both knees. ""would" and "will" are both good in the sentence about being able to move faster after curing them, as are "could" and "can," but the first of both might be better because it is still not definite. " There is no need for the hyphen in one-life.
- You mention only one knee in the first sentence, but it seems by the rest of the entry that you are referring to both knees.
- ""would" and "will" are both good in the sentence about being able to move faster after curing them, as are "could" and "can," but the first of both might be better because it is still not definite.
- " There is no need for the hyphen in one-life.
- It should be one's (or "a") lifetime.
- " I hope this helps you some with your writing.
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You mention only one knee in the first sentence, but it seems by the rest of the entry that you are referring to both knees. Secondly, you say that your friend told you something incredible, but it is very believable, and you do seem to believe it, so I don't know why you used the word "incredible.""would" and "will" are both good in the sentence about being able to move faster after curing them,
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