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Yoong Liat Posted 19 years ago
Essay & Composition Writing

short composition

1b00Hi guys,02b02br
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01b00This passage is for 1st-year students. Could someone please edit it for me. Thank you in advance.02b02br
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00 The firemen have arrived to fight the fire, which is spreading quickly. 02br
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00 They used their hoses to spray water on the fire. One of the firemen heard a child crying. He used a ladder to enter the flat through the open window to save the child. The crowd cheered when they saw the fireman climbed down. As he was carrying the child down the ladder, they cheered.02br
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00 Soon the fire was put out. The firemen then left in the fire engine. 0-
  

Top answer

0Hi,02br 02br 01font 00The firemen 01i 01font 00had arrived 01b 00or02b 00 arrived02font 02i 00 00to fight the fire, which 00was00 spreading quickly. 02font 02br 02br 01font 00They used their hoses to spray water on it. One of them heard a child crying, so to save it he used a ladder to enter the flat through the open window.

— Clive

  • 0Hi,02br 02br 01font 00The firemen 01i 01font 00had arrived 01b 00or02b 00 arrived02font 02i 00 00to fight the fire, which 00was00 spreading quickly.
  • 02font 02br 02br 01font 00They used their hoses to spray water on it.
  • One of them heard a child crying, so to save it he used a ladder to enter the flat through the open window.
  • 02font 02br 02br 01font 00Soon the fire was put out and the firemen left.
  • 02font 02br 02br 00I've just editted it for good English, not for what is suitable for the level of the students.
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0Hi,02br
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01font00The firemen 01i01font00had arrived 01b00or02b00 arrived02font02i00 00to fight the fire, which 00was00 spreading quickly. 02font02br
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01font00They used their hoses to spray
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0 Should you perhaps write this in one tense only? Present tense for a sense of immediacy; past tense as a reportive narrative?0-
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01cite10Feebs1112cite10Should you perhaps write this in one tense only? Present tense for a sense of immediacy; past tense as a reportive narrative?12br
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10Clive is correct in changing the first sentence as follows:02br
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01font00The firemen 01i
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