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Yoong Liat Posted 19 years ago
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00Another short composition for 1st-year students. Could someone please edit it for me. Thank you in advance. 02br
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00 Ivy was returning home from school. On the way, she saw a puppy in the drain. She carried it up. It was shivering. Ivy believed that it was shivering because it was very hungry and thirsty.02br
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00 She took it home and gave it a warm bath. Then she gave it some milk. It lapped up the milk quickly. After that, she went to buy a packet of dog's food and fed the puppy with it. She loved the puppy very much because it looked cute. She asked her parents whether she could keep it as a pet. His parents agreed.02br
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00 00Ivy was very happy. She kissed her parents. She asked her mother what she should name the puppy. Her mother suggested that she call it Lucky. Ivy said, “I like the name. Thanks, Mum.”02br
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00 00It was indeed lucky that Lucky has found a new home.0-
  

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0 01blockquote 01cite 10Yoong Liat12cite 10Hi guys12br 12br 10Another short composition for 1st-year students. Could somene please edit it for me. Thank you in advance.

— Pieanne

  • 0 01blockquote 01cite 10Yoong Liat12cite 10Hi guys12br 12br 10Another short composition for 1st-year students.
  • Could somene please edit it for me.
  • Thank you in advance.
  • 12br 12br 10 Ivy was returning home from school.
  • On 11font 10her12font 10 way, she saw a puppy in the drain.
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01cite10Yoong Liat12cite10Hi guys12br
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10Another short composition for 1st-year students. Could somene please edit it for me. Thank you in advance. 12br
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10 Ivy was returning home from school. On 11font10her12font10 way, she saw a puppy
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0Hello P01b01font00ieanne02font02b02br
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01font01b00You were fast. After02b00 I've edited my compostion, I fou02font01font01b00nd your prompt reply. 02b02font00It's 01font01b
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01cite10Yoong Liat12cite10Hi guys12br
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10Another short composition for 1st-year students. Could someone please edit it for me. Thank you in advance. 12br
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10 Ivy was returning home from school. On10 the10 way, she saw a puppy in the drain. She 10carried10 it up. It
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0Hello P01b01font00ieanne02font02b02br
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00His 01font00if Ivy's a girl, then it's "her" 02font00parents agreed.02br
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00You're right. I've mixed up 'her' with 'his'.0-
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0 I'd change something in this sentence:02br
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00It was indeed lucky that Lucky has found a new home.0-
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01cite10Spinnaker12cite10I'd change something in this sentence:12br
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10It was indeed lucky that Lucky has found a new home.12br
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10Please tell me how you would rephrase it.0-
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0 Maybe: fortunate02br
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00=> It was indeed fortunate that Lucky has found a new home.02br
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00It's sound a little bit strange, ... lucky that Lucky ...0-
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01cite10Yoong Liat12cite11blockquote
11cite20Spinnaker22cite20I'd change something in this sentence:22br
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20It was indeed lucky that Lucky has found a new home.22br
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20Please tell me how you would rephrase it.12br
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0 I'm sure you know it better than me!02br
00So don't change something in this sentence.0-
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0 I found the "was" clashed with the "has found"... I would have used "is". 0-
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