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Yoong Liat Posted 19 years ago
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0This composition is meant for a child who is in his/her first year at school. Could someone please edit it for me. Thank you very much. Happy New Year.02br
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00The dismissal bell rings. Alice goes to the bus stop to wait for her mother to pick her up. She is always waiting for Alice before she reaches the bus stop.02br
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00 01b00 02b00About five minutes later, Alice goes back to her school. She tells one of the teachers that her mother is not here yet. The teacher asks for her mother’s mobile telephone number. She then telephones her.02br
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01b00 00Her mother tells the teacher that there is a traffic jam She says that she will be at the bus stop in about a minute.02b02br
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00 00Alice thanks the teacher and leaves for the bus stop. Soon she sees her mother’s car coming. When she has got into the car, her mother apologises to her. Alice says, “It’s all right, Mum.”02br
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0Every time the dismissal bell rings, Alice goes to the bus stop to wait for her mother to pick her up. 02br 02br 01b 00 02b 00About five minutes later waiting her mom at the bus stop, Alice went back to her school. She told one of her teachers that her mother had not been here yet.

  • 0Every time the dismissal bell rings, Alice goes to the bus stop to wait for her mother to pick her up.
  • 02br 02br 01b 00 02b 00About five minutes later waiting her mom at the bus stop, Alice went back to her school.
  • She told one of her teachers that her mother had not been here yet.
  • The teacher asked for her mother’s cell number.
  • 02b 02br 02br 00 Alice thanked her teacher and left for the bus stop.
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0Every time the dismissal bell rings, Alice goes to the bus stop to wait for her mother to pick her up. Her mother always waits for her before she reaches the bus stop.02br
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01b00 02b00About five minutes later waiting her mom at the bus stop, Alice went back to her school. She told one of her teachers that her mother had not been here yet. The teacher
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00The composition is written in present tense. You've changed it to a compostion in the past tense.02br
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00This composition is meant for a child in his/her first year of school. That's why it is written in the present tense.02br
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