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Several years ago, right after earning my master’s, I started working as an algorithm analyst in a medical system company. Although I knew nothing about digital medical image processing in the first place, one month later I managed to design an algorithm which shortened the length of production and was crucial for putting the corresponding product into the market.

This is part of my coverr letter. Could you please help me make it better? Any comments are welcome! Thanks.

BBSER

Avangi · Accepted Answer

I think it's quite good.

"In the first place" seems too offhand. It's out of style with the rest of your piece.
Perhaps, "Although when I began, I knew nothing etc."

Not being familiar with the process, I find "production" a strange word here.
(I don't think you should use both "processing the image" and "producing the image" in the same sentence. To me, there's a conceptual difference.)
(Perhaps you don't mean production of the image ???)

I'm not sure which is the common usage: "a medical system company," or "a medical systems company." My ear favors the second.

Bbser · Answer

Thank you, Avangi. All your comments are very helpful. It should be medical systems company.
I will think about the rest of your comments and make adjustments accordingly.

Please follow up this thread later if you had time. Thanks a lot.

BBSER

AvangiI think it's quite good. "In the first place" seems too offhand. It's out of style with the rest of your piece.Perhaps, "Although when I began, I knew nothing etc."Not being familiar with the process, I find "production" a strange word here.(I don't think you should use both "processing the image" and "producing the image" in the same sentence. To me, there's a conceptual difference.)(Perhaps you don't mean production of the image ???)I'm not sure which is the common usage: "a medical system company," or "a medical systems company." My ear favors the second.

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