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Sailsofoblivion Posted 11 years ago
Grammar

Separation of speech

Hello, I was just wondering if this should be one paragraph or whether it works better when split up? Thanks in advance!

Single paragraph:

“I can’t,” I eventually blurted. I quickly realised that this sounded harsh; especially considering how long it had taken him to ask me. So I made up an excuse, “I’m sorry. I’ve got a boyfriend.”

Split up:

“I can’t,” I eventually blurted.

I quickly realised that this sounded harsh; especially considering how long it had taken him to ask me.

So I made up an excuse, “I’m sorry. I’ve got a boyfriend.”
  

Top answer

I don't think I would start a new paragraph at "So". I don't feel strongly about the other paragraph break. I would change the semicolon before "especially" to a comma.

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  • I don't think I would start a new paragraph at "So".
  • I don't feel strongly about the other paragraph break.
  • I would change the semicolon before "especially" to a comma.
  • The comma after "excuse" doesn't seem strong enough to me.
  • You could try a full stop there?
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I don't think I would start a new paragraph at "So". I don't feel strongly about the other paragraph break.

I would change the semicolon before "especially" to a comma. The comma after "excuse" doesn't seem strong enough to me. You could try a full stop there?
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