Sentences about culture?

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Could you check these, please?

1) A pure desire to know everything about an unknown world that no one has reached yet—from the world of art, such as painting and music, to that of entertainment—maintains “culture.”

2) A group of people called scientists are those who enjoy challenging the limits of knowledge. “Culture” is not only the results but also the process of such challenges. It is meaningless to determine whether “culture” is useful or not.

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teacherJapan

1) A pure desire to know everything about an unknown world that no one has reached yet—from the world of art, such as painting and music, to that of entertainment—maintains “culture.”
2) A group of people called scientists are those who enjoy challenging the limits of knowledge. “Culture” is not only the results but also the process of such challenges. It is meaningless to determine whether “culture” is useful or not.

As a start, in 2) I would make some changes. (See the highlighted sections.)

a) I would write just 'Scientists'.
b) I would change 'determine' to 'ask'.
c) I would not put 'culture' in quotation marks.

Another change might improve 2):

Culture includes not only the results of such challenges but also the process of developing them.

Others may have further suggestions.

CJ

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teacherJapan1) A pure desire to know everything about an unknown world that no one has reached yet—from the world of art, such as painting and music, to that of entertainment—maintains “culture.”

"From" lays a false scent. The reader has just read about reaching a world, and he thinks "from" is where that journey started. It turns out you are using the formula "from (one end) to (the other end)" but that formula requires more extreme ends than art and entertainment. And the formula fails if you shoehorn in a parenthetical because by the time the reader gets to the "to", he's given up on the "from". The quotation marks around "culture" are inscrutable. Also, native readers of English don't like to wait for the verb ("maintains") that long. They have to backtrack for the subject when it at long last arrives. Maybe

What maintains culture is a pure desire to know everything about an unknown world that no one has reached yet.

teacherJapan2) A group of people called scientists are those who enjoy challenging the limits of knowledge. “Culture” is not only the results but also the process of such challenges. It is meaningless to determine whether “culture” is useful or not.

"A group of people called scientists" is awkward. I'm not sure you can challenge a limit. There are those quotation marks, again. You want the singular "result". I'm not sure that to determine can be meaningless. I don't see how the third sentence follows logically. By the time we get to the end, the scientists have disappeared, so we wonder why they were mentioned in the first place. Maybe

The people we call scientists are those who enjoy exploring the boundaries of knowledge. Culture is not only the result but also the process of such exploration. It is meaningless to ask whether culture is useful or not; it arises from useful activity such as science.

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