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Anonymous Posted 10 years ago
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Hi teechr, please help me to review the below and let me know if you spot any grammatical mistakes so that I can make the necessary changes.
1. KK is born and bred in an urbanite’s sophisticated life. When he plans to marry Irika, he is dreaming of a seaside six-star hotel wedding, but she requests the opposite. He tries to fulfill her request, but it instead puts a strain in the couple’s relationship. What can she possibly want that it halts KK’s dream wedding from realization?
2. KK is born and bred in an urbanite’s sophisticated life. When he plans to marry Irika, he is dreaming of a seaside six-star hotel wedding, but Irika wants their ceremony to be held at her remote village in an unknown island. Will KK be persuaded to do it the humble way? Or will this become the deal breaker of their relationship?
1. KK is born and bred in an urbanite’s sophisticated life. When he plans to marry Irika, he is dreaming of a seaside six-star hotel wedding, but she requests the opposite. He tries to fulfill her request, but it instead puts a strain in the couple’s relationship. What can she possibly want that it halts KK’s dream wedding from realization?
2. KK is born and bred in an urbanite’s sophisticated life. When he plans to marry Irika, he is dreaming of a seaside six-star hotel wedding, but Irika wants their ceremony to be held at her remote village in an unknown island. Will KK be persuaded to do it the humble way? Or will this become the deal breaker of their relationship?
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can someone please help to check the below, thank you.
- can someone please help to check the below, thank you.
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Both versions are understandable, but in need of revision. There are a number of ways these could be revised, but I personally would write them as follows (US usage):
1. K (the letters "KK" have negative implications in US English) was raised in an urban yuppie environment and wants to marry his fiancée Irika in a seaside wedding at a luxury resort. But she wants a simple wedding. He
1. K (the letters "KK" have negative implications in US English) was raised in an urban yuppie environment and wants to marry his fiancée Irika in a seaside wedding at a luxury resort. But she wants a simple wedding. He
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