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Cboutin3 Posted 12 years ago
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Do these two sentence flow correctly?
Impressed with Dalamar’s skill in both magic and intrigue, the Conclave of Wizards sent him on an important and secretive mission to demonstrate his loyalty. On this assignment, Dalamar tracked down and killed Tramd o' the Dark, a renegade Theiwar mage whose body was half-rotten.
Impressed with Dalamar’s skill in both magic and intrigue, the Conclave of Wizards sent him on an important and secretive mission to demonstrate his loyalty. On this assignment, Dalamar tracked down and killed Tramd o' the Dark, a renegade Theiwar mage whose body was half-rotten.
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It flows fine until the very end, where half-rotten seems to jump right out at the reader. Should there be an explanation for this unattractive state?
- It flows fine until the very end, where half-rotten seems to jump right out at the reader.
- Should there be an explanation for this unattractive state?
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It flows fine until the very end, where half-rotten seems to jump right out at the reader. Should there be an explanation for this unattractive state?
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