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Perfect Stranger Posted 10 years ago
Grammar

[sentence structure] written well enough or not?

Dear Users,
Would you mind looking at the following e-mail crafted by me and tell me if it's written well enough?

Dear XYZ,
Due to the fact that my company provides me with another VPN client, I'd like to resign from using IP Vanish before the next cycle begins (Feb. 2nd 2016)
Looking forward to your reply,
Best,
ABC
  

Top answer

Dear XYZ, My company is providing me with another VPN client, so I'd like to stop using IP Vanish before the next cycle begins on February 2nd. Thank you very much. Sincerely yours, ABC

— Mister Micawber

  • Dear XYZ, My company is providing me with another VPN client, so I'd like to stop using IP Vanish before the next cycle begins on February 2nd.
  • Thank you very much.
  • Sincerely yours, ABC
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Dear XYZ,

My company is providing me with another VPN client, so I'd like to stop using IP Vanish before the next cycle begins on February 2nd.

Thank you very much.

Sincerely yours,

ABC
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Thank you MM.
May I ask some further questions? Your version skips the introductory due to the fact. Is it because it's redundant and unnecessary here? Also, is it correct to say that we resign from using a service?
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Perfect StrangerMay I ask some further questions?
Of course!
Perfect Stranger Your version skips the introductory due to the fact. Is it because it's redundant and unnecessary here?
It is not only unnecessary but it is also one of the ugliest phrases in the language. I eschew it.
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