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Perfect Stranger Posted 10 years ago
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[sentence structure] Is this sentence too long?

Dear Users,

Would you say this sentence flows well? I feel it's quite long, but not too long. Not sure what native speakers would say. Also, I'm not sure if where is correct there. Punctuation might be missing too.

I have already had a fantastic opportunity to teach at BCE Greek Language Institute here in Athens as an Adjunct Lecturer during the first semester where I was responsible for teaching two courses that were part of the Professional Skills Program and I would be very excited to continue my work as a full-time instructor.

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It's a bit too long and should be broken up, the comma is important, it needs reordering, and it can be tightened: I would be very excited to continue my work as a full-time instru ctor at BCE Greek Language Institute here in Athens. I ha ve already had a fantastic opportunity to teach as an Adjunct Lecturer during the first semes ter, w here I was responsible for teaching two courses in the Professional Skills Program.

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  • It's a bit too long and should be broken up, the comma is important, it needs reordering, and it can be tightened: I would be very excited to continue my work as a full-time instru ctor at BCE Greek Language Institute here in Athens.
  • I ha ve already had a fantastic opportunity to teach as an Adjunct Lecturer during the first semes ter, w here I was responsible for teaching two courses in the Professional Skills Program.
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It's a bit too long and should be broken up, the comma is important, it needs reordering, and it can be tightened:

I would be very excited to continue my work as a full-time instructor at BCE Greek Language Institute here in Athens. I have already had a fantastic opportunity to teach as an Adjunct Lecturer during the first semester, where I was responsible for teaching tw
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