Sentence structure

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Could you tell me whether the following sentence sounds natural?
Particularly, I am not sure if the underlined part is acceptable in terms of English grammar.

If the ice on the Arctic Ocean melts, a new sea route linking the Pacific with the Atlantic will be available making shipping time cultailed up to 3 weeks half of the present 6 weeks.

Clive · Accepted Answer

Try again, Lucas. The last part is a disaster.

How about two sentences?

Lucas21c · Answer

How about this revised one?

If the ice on the Arctic Ocean melts, a new sea route linking the Pacific with the Atlantic will be available while it makes its shipping time reduced by 3 weeks, half of the present 6 weeks.

Clive · Answer

Still needs work.

eg
If the ice on the Arctic Ocean melts, a new sea route linking the Pacific with the Atlantic will be available, which will reduce shipping time reduced by 3 weeks, half of the present 6 weeks.

eg
If the ice on the Arctic Ocean melts, a new sea route linking the Pacific with the Atlantic will be available, which will halve shipping time to 3 weeks.

eg
If the ice on the Arctic Ocean melts, a new sea route linking the Pacific with the Atlantic will be available. This will halve shipping time to 3 weeks..

Clive

Canadian45 · Answer

Clive.....If the ice on the Arctic Ocean melts, a new sea route linking the Pacific with the Atlantic will be available, which will reduce shipping time ~~reduced by 3 weeks,~~ to half of the present 6 weeks.

If the ice on the Arctic Ocean melts, a new sea route linking the Pacific with the Atlantic will be available, which will halve shipping time to 3 weeks

Now both are very similar.
I would prefer a change of ',which will' to 'and will'. I think that change sounds better.

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