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Cboutin3 Posted 12 years ago
Grammar
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Which sentence is a better choice? FYI- Qualinesti is the elven realm.
1. During the War of Souls, Beryllinthranox continued her schemes against the elves, and she became considerably interested when she learned of Palin’s arrival in Qualinesti and that he was in possession of a powerful magical artifact.
2. During the War of Souls, Beryllinthranox continued her schemes against the elves and became considerably interested when she learned of Palin’s arrival in Qualinesti and that he was in possession of a powerful magical artifact.
1. During the War of Souls, Beryllinthranox continued her schemes against the elves, and she became considerably interested when she learned of Palin’s arrival in Qualinesti and that he was in possession of a powerful magical artifact.
2. During the War of Souls, Beryllinthranox continued her schemes against the elves and became considerably interested when she learned of Palin’s arrival in Qualinesti and that he was in possession of a powerful magical artifact.
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Again, because of your typically involved sentences, the first reads better (with the comma, repeated subject and new verb).
- Again, because of your typically involved sentences, the first reads better (with the comma, repeated subject and new verb).
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Again, because of your typically involved sentences, the first reads better (with the comma, repeated subject and new verb).
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