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Sailsofoblivion Posted 11 years ago
Grammar
Sentence Length
Is this sentence a little too long? I'm not sure if it would work better if I put "I should be a professional actress" onto a new line...
“I’m not sure,” I answered, “He’s had suspicions about me and another man, and was pretty angry when I wouldn’t let him read through my emails,” I should be a professional actress.
As opposed to:
“I’m not sure,” I answered, “He’s had suspicions about me and another man, and was pretty angry when I wouldn’t let him read through my emails."
I should be a professional actress.
Thanks in advance!
“I’m not sure,” I answered, “He’s had suspicions about me and another man, and was pretty angry when I wouldn’t let him read through my emails,” I should be a professional actress.
As opposed to:
“I’m not sure,” I answered, “He’s had suspicions about me and another man, and was pretty angry when I wouldn’t let him read through my emails."
I should be a professional actress.
Thanks in advance!
Top answer
The problem with the first isn't its length. It's that it's two sentences -- he's had suspicions and I should be an actress . Both have subjects and predicates and are unlinked by anything other than a comma.
- The problem with the first isn't its length.
- It's that it's two sentences -- he's had suspicions and I should be an actress .
- Both have subjects and predicates and are unlinked by anything other than a comma.
- This is called a run-on sentence.
- You correct this in your second try, where the independent thought about the speaker's acting ability stands alone as a comment on the attempted deflection of the previous sentence.
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The problem with the first isn't its length. It's that it's two sentences -- he's had suspicions and I should be an actress. Both have subjects and predicates and are unlinked by anything other than a comma. This is called a run-on sentence. You correct this in your second try, where the independent thought about the speaker's acting ability stands alone as a comment on the attem
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deadratThe problem with the first isn't its length. It's that it's two sentences -- he's had suspicions and I should be an actress. Both have subjects and predicates and are unlinked by anything other than a comma. This is called a run-on sentence. You correct this in your second try, where the independent thought about the speaker's acting ability stands alone as a comme
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