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Haloony Posted 17 years ago
Grammar

Sentence help-clarity

Hi all,

I am having some trouble with this sentence:

Insofar, the objection continues, as the patient performs this risk assessment, it 
should be clear that the patient does understand what is beneficial for his well-being.

The preceding sentences introduce an objection to an argument that I am making. The above
sentence is an elaboration of that objection. I want to make sure the reader know that I am
still presenting an objection and not my argument. I feel like the above formulation is quite 
awkward so I was hoping that someone could help me out.

Thanks,
Hal
  

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Hi, Your version doesn't seem too bad to me. Presumably you began your explanation of the objection by indicating youwere going to present an objection. Can't you structure your writing in such a way that the whole objection is explained at once, for example by devoting a separate paragraph to it?

— Clive

  • Hi, Your version doesn't seem too bad to me.
  • Presumably you began your explanation of the objection by indicating youwere going to present an objection.
  • Can't you structure your writing in such a way that the whole objection is explained at once, for example by devoting a separate paragraph to it?
  • That way, you could avoid saying .
  • .
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Hi,

Your version doesn't seem too bad to me.

Presumably you began your explanation of the objection by indicating youwere going to present an objection. Can't you structure your writing in such a way that the whole objection is explained at once, for example by devoting a separate paragraph to it? That way, you could avoid saying . . . it continues . . . it continues . . .
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