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Americanwithgrammarquestions Posted 11 years ago
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These are are the two versions of my sentence:
1. There is a real chance my foray into the financial sector, sordid though it may have been, will be viewed by employers as some sort of advantage.
Or 2. There is a real chance my foray into the financial sector will be viewed, sordid though it may have been, as some sort of advantage.
Other than that, does that look like a good sentence to you? Are there any obvious (but not to me) ways it could be improved? Thank you.
1. There is a real chance my foray into the financial sector, sordid though it may have been, will be viewed by employers as some sort of advantage.
Or 2. There is a real chance my foray into the financial sector will be viewed, sordid though it may have been, as some sort of advantage.
Other than that, does that look like a good sentence to you? Are there any obvious (but not to me) ways it could be improved? Thank you.
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Version 1 is better because it's clearer in meaning; the foray is sordid !.
- Version 1 is better because it's clearer in meaning; the foray is sordid !.
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Version 1 is better because it's clearer in meaning; the foray is sordid !. 
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