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Starvinghysterical Posted 11 years ago
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This is it as it's structured right now: "I finished my career among the all-time leaders in assists and am recalled by many as the greatest pickup basketball player in the history of Dawgs Park."
Now before this point in the essay I have yet to mention anything at all of my own playing days. The essay's about basketball, though. For the record it's a joke about the lack of progress in my basketball "career." My question is basically this: Can I start the sentence with "I fnished my career among the all-time leaders in assists" before they have any idea what I'm talking about, what context I'm talking about, what league I'm in? Or should the two statements somehow be reversed? Maybe: "I am recalled by many as the greatest pickup basketball player in the history of Dawgs Park and finished my career among the all-time leaders in assists." Thank you.
Now before this point in the essay I have yet to mention anything at all of my own playing days. The essay's about basketball, though. For the record it's a joke about the lack of progress in my basketball "career." My question is basically this: Can I start the sentence with "I fnished my career among the all-time leaders in assists" before they have any idea what I'm talking about, what context I'm talking about, what league I'm in? Or should the two statements somehow be reversed? Maybe: "I am recalled by many as the greatest pickup basketball player in the history of Dawgs Park and finished my career among the all-time leaders in assists." Thank you.
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This is good without any prior context: Many recall me as the greatest pickup basketball player in the history of Dawgs Park. I finished my career among the all-time leaders in assists. It's aching for an adverb: Many recall me nostalgically / enthusiastically as the greatest ...
- This is good without any prior context: Many recall me as the greatest pickup basketball player in the history of Dawgs Park.
- I finished my career among the all-time leaders in assists.
- It's aching for an adverb: Many recall me nostalgically / enthusiastically as the greatest ...
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This is good without any prior context:
Many recall me as the greatest pickup basketball player in the history of Dawgs Park. I finished my career among the all-time leaders in assists.
It's aching for an adverb:
Many recall me nostalgically / enthusiastically as the greatest ...
Many recall me as the greatest pickup basketball player in the history of Dawgs Park. I finished my career among the all-time leaders in assists.
It's aching for an adverb:
Many recall me nostalgically / enthusiastically as the greatest ...
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OK … what about the two options I listed orignially? Thanks.
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Reversal of the statements is advised so that there is a context for the reader who might not connect with "assists."
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