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English 1b3 Posted 16 years ago
Grammar

Sentence Forming

a. I was so drunk last night, so drunk I told my boss to shut it.

b. Matt and I were so drunk last night, Matt so drunk he told me to shut it.

c. Matt and I were so drunk, Matt so drunk he told me to shut it and me so drunk I punched him in the face.





Are these all correct?

Do you prefer the following re-writes?



a. I was so drunk last night that I told my boss to shut it.

b. Matt and I were so drunk. He was so drunk that he told me to shut it.

c. Matt and I were so drunk. Matt was so drunk that he told me to shut it, and I was so drunk that I punched him in the face.



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Top answer

I much prefer the re-writes. I think of the first set as transcriptions of speech.

  • I much prefer the re-writes.
  • I think of the first set as transcriptions of speech.
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I much prefer the re-writes. I think of the first set as transcriptions of speech.
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Mister Micawber I think of the first set as transcriptions of speech.

Isn't that seen as good writing? Emulating the way we speak is an idiomatic and clear style.
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Not at all. They are two different Englishes. Transcriptions are for recording dialogue.

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