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Sentence correction in my essay: pls help!
0 Could anybody please check my essay? I would like to know if there is any mistake in it. Please help! 02 br
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01 b 00 Describe the following table which shows the aspects of quality of life in five countries. 02 b 00 (Sorry, I am not giving the table here. Just check the essay for any grammatical mistake, please.) 02 br
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00 The given table shows the aspects of the quality of life in five countries – 01 00 Bangladesh 02 00 , 01 00 Bolivia 02 00 , 01 00 Egypt 02 00 , 01 00 Indonesia 02 00 and 01 02 00 . It uses four economic indicators to show the comparison between the given countries. Just having one look on the table we can say that 01 02 00 has pretty much better quality of life than other countries given in the table. 02 br
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01 02 00 has the highest GNP per head of all the given countries. It is about 100 times higher than 01 02 00 . 01 02 00 ’s infant mortality rate per 1000 live births is also much lower than other countries in the table. 02 br
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00 has the lowest GNP per head with shortest life expectancy at birth which is 40 years. The infant mortality rate in 01 02 00 is greater than other four countries. It is about ten times greater than 00 ’s infant mortality rate. 02 br
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01 00 Bolivia 02 00 , 01 00 Egypt 02 00 and 01 00 Indonesia 02 00 have almost similar GNP per head which is about four to five times higher than 01 00 Bangladesh 02 00 ’s but still about twenty times lower than 01 02 00 ’s. Their life expectancy is around 50 years which is slightly longer than 01 02 00 ’s. 01 00 Egypt 02 00 has higher life expectancy than 01 00 Bolivia 02 00 and 01 02 00 . 00 has highest ( 01 b 01 i 00 or higher? 02 i 02 b 00 ) infant mortality rate than 01 00 Egypt 02 00 and 00 . 02 br
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00 We can easily conclude from the table that 01 02 00 has a better quality of life than other countries given in the table. And, it may take a very long time for other four countries to reach that level. 02 br
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01 b 00 Time taken – 20 mins 02 b 02 br
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01 b 00 Length – 235 words 02 b 02 br
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00 Thanks. 02 br
01 b 00 Describe the following table which shows the aspects of quality of life in five countries. 02 b 00 (Sorry, I am not giving the table here. Just check the essay for any grammatical mistake, please.) 02 br
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00 The given table shows the aspects of the quality of life in five countries – 01 00 Bangladesh 02 00 , 01 00 Bolivia 02 00 , 01 00 Egypt 02 00 , 01 00 Indonesia 02 00 and 01 02 00 . It uses four economic indicators to show the comparison between the given countries. Just having one look on the table we can say that 01 02 00 has pretty much better quality of life than other countries given in the table. 02 br
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01 02 00 has the highest GNP per head of all the given countries. It is about 100 times higher than 01 02 00 . 01 02 00 ’s infant mortality rate per 1000 live births is also much lower than other countries in the table. 02 br
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00 has the lowest GNP per head with shortest life expectancy at birth which is 40 years. The infant mortality rate in 01 02 00 is greater than other four countries. It is about ten times greater than 00 ’s infant mortality rate. 02 br
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01 00 Bolivia 02 00 , 01 00 Egypt 02 00 and 01 00 Indonesia 02 00 have almost similar GNP per head which is about four to five times higher than 01 00 Bangladesh 02 00 ’s but still about twenty times lower than 01 02 00 ’s. Their life expectancy is around 50 years which is slightly longer than 01 02 00 ’s. 01 00 Egypt 02 00 has higher life expectancy than 01 00 Bolivia 02 00 and 01 02 00 . 00 has highest ( 01 b 01 i 00 or higher? 02 i 02 b 00 ) infant mortality rate than 01 00 Egypt 02 00 and 00 . 02 br
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00 We can easily conclude from the table that 01 02 00 has a better quality of life than other countries given in the table. And, it may take a very long time for other four countries to reach that level. 02 br
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01 b 00 Time taken – 20 mins 02 b 02 br
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01 b 00 Length – 235 words 02 b 02 br
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0 Is this something you have to submit as part of a test (I wonder as you've given time and word count, and that is pretty standard practise for exams/tests you take at home and send in). I'm don't think it would be ethical for us to help if that is the case - not to mention that it is pretty common now for examining boards to check for internet use/plagiarism etc, and this thread might then show that you received help. 0-
- 0 Is this something you have to submit as part of a test (I wonder as you've given time and word count, and that is pretty standard practise for exams/tests you take at home and send in).
- I'm don't think it would be ethical for us to help if that is the case - not to mention that it is pretty common now for examining boards to check for internet use/plagiarism etc, and this thread might then show that you received help.
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0 Is this something you have to submit as part of a test (I wonder as you've given time and word count, and that is pretty standard practise for exams/tests you take at home and send in). I'm don't think it would be ethical for us to help if that is the case - not to mention that it is pretty common now for examining boards to check for internet use/plagiarism etc, and this thread might then sho
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0 I am preparing for IELTS exam. The exam's has two writing tasks. Task 1 has some kind of graph, table or bar which we have to describe in about 20 minutes in more than 150 words. So I am practicing describing some graphs or tables available on the internet. This table I found in a book. Of course, the description is given below the table but I need to develop my writing skills for the exam. 0
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