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Silak12 Posted 14 years ago
Grammar

Sentence Correction?

Hi! everyone. Could you help me with this dialogue I don't know what will fit better in place of the colored one in the last line of this dialogue? I wrote the whole dialogue just to make you understand the situation.(Jack came back home from the market after shopping)
Father-Hi! Jack.
Jack- Hi!
Father-So what did you bring in that shopper?
Jack-Just bought a pair of suede shoes, and I want to wear them now to check whether it fits me or not because I didn't check them on the shop and he said this was the largest he had and you know my foot is too large to fit any of the shoes in that shop.(Jack tries to fit the shoes in his foots but he can't because his foot is too big to fit in that shoe.)
Jack-What the hell! I can't just put my foot in it.
Father-Yaa apparently it looked too big to fit in your foot,I guessed that when I first saw it .
(Jack interrupting his father)No, Actually there was another pair in that shop which fitted my foot in but I kinda didn't like that they were more like the galoshes and you know I don't like galoshes.
Father-And you know it very well that In terms of shoes you have no choice to choose the one you like. (Is the foregoing sentence said by father correct?) and you also know it very well that your foot is too big to fit in any good looking shoe this whole city's shoe shops contain. (Is the colored sentence correct? or I should say "With regard to shoe selection you have to except your likeings or choices or favourites"I think the father said that colored sentence because Jack's foot is too big to fit in any good looking shoe or the shoe of his choice(obviously Jack likes to wear good looking shoes)
Please help me with the colored sentence in which better ways I can say that sentence said by the father. Thanks!
  

Top answer

Your dialog is not realistic; it is too explanatory. In addition, the premise is wrong: no one buys shoes without trying them on. What's a 'shopper'?

  • Your dialog is not realistic; it is too explanatory.
  • In addition, the premise is wrong: no one buys shoes without trying them on.
  • What's a 'shopper'?
  • Father: Hi, J ack.
  • Jack: Hi!
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Your dialog is not realistic; it is too explanatory. In addition, the premise is wrong: no one buys shoes without trying them on. What's a 'shopper'?

Father: Hi, Jack.
Jack: Hi!
Father: What have you got in your shopper / bag?
Jack: Suede shoes. I'm going to try them on to see if they fit. The clerk said

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