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Spooner Posted 15 years ago
Essay & Composition Writing
Sentence correction
I wanna know if the sentence below, which I wrote, is grammatically correct or needs some correction.
Any suggestions will be much appreciated. THANKS
"It’s hard not to think that much of what people have feared is slowly turning into reality after hearing about a survey conducted by the Supreme Court which shows that, besides already enjoying the highest divorce rates in the world, there is a huge uptick in divorce rates among newly wedded couples."
Any suggestions will be much appreciated. THANKS
"It’s hard not to think that much of what people have feared is slowly turning into reality after hearing about a survey conducted by the Supreme Court which shows that, besides already enjoying the highest divorce rates in the world, there is a huge uptick in divorce rates among newly wedded couples."
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Hello, Spooner - and welcome to English Forums. Your sentence is longer and more convoluted than it should be, leading to uncertain referents: It’s easy to believe that our fears are being realized when a Supreme Court survey has shown that the US, besides enjoying the highest divorce rate in the world , has also experienced a surge in divorces among newlyweds.
- Hello, Spooner - and welcome to English Forums.
- Your sentence is longer and more convoluted than it should be, leading to uncertain referents: It’s easy to believe that our fears are being realized when a Supreme Court survey has shown that the US, besides enjoying the highest divorce rate in the world , has also experienced a surge in divorces among newlyweds.
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Hello, Spooner - and welcome to English Forums.
Your sentence is longer and more convoluted than it should be, leading to uncertain referents:
It’s easy to believe that our fears are being realized when a Supreme Court survey has shown that the US, besides enjoying the highest divorce rate in the world, has also experienc
Your sentence is longer and more convoluted than it should be, leading to uncertain referents:
It’s easy to believe that our fears are being realized when a Supreme Court survey has shown that the US, besides enjoying the highest divorce rate in the world, has also experienc
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