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Guptavandy Posted 15 years ago
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Also, in order to ensure the radiation safety of the NPP personnel, NPP water chemistry has to be intended for the reduction of radiation fields arising due to ionising radiation from corrosion-induced activated products that form deposits on the surfaces of NPP equipment and pipelines, mass transfer of corrosion-induced activated products in the equipment and pipelines being taken into account.
Also, in order to ensure the radiation safety of the NPP personnel, NPP water chemistry has to be intended for the reduction of radiation fields arising due to ionising radiation from corrosion-induced activated products that form deposits on the surfaces of NPP equipment and pipelines, mass transfer of corrosion-induced activated products in the equipment and pipelines being taken into account.
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Hi, Yes, it needs to be split into shorter sentences. It's close to incomprehensible as one sentence. Revise and post it again, if you wish.
- Hi, Yes, it needs to be split into shorter sentences.
- It's close to incomprehensible as one sentence.
- Revise and post it again, if you wish.
- Clive
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Hi,
Yes, it needs to be split into shorter sentences. It's close to incomprehensible as one sentence.
Revise and post it again, if you wish.
Clive
Yes, it needs to be split into shorter sentences. It's close to incomprehensible as one sentence.
Revise and post it again, if you wish.
Clive
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