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Wepro Posted 16 years ago
Grammar
Sentence Correction
After bounty hunters turn over their captives to the authorities , they often
are denied due process of law
.
Which of these rewrited sentences is correct?
1.The authorities often deny captives due process of law after bounty hunters
turn captives over to the authorities.
2.A captive ,when turned over by bounty hunters to the authorities ,is often denied
due process of law.
(1) seems to be wordy and it repeats the word "authorities" and "captives".
However (2) is not better. It should be written as "is turned over" .
So what
do you think ?
Thanks in advance.
are denied due process of law
.
Which of these rewrited sentences is correct?
1.The authorities often deny captives due process of law after bounty hunters
turn captives over to the authorities.
2.A captive ,when turned over by bounty hunters to the authorities ,is often denied
due process of law.
(1) seems to be wordy and it repeats the word "authorities" and "captives".
However (2) is not better. It should be written as "is turned over" .
So what
do you think ?
Thanks in advance.
Top answer
The second one is perfectly clear, and has no redundancies. If you removed the repeated words from the first example, it would be ambiguous. The second one is clearly better, but both are correct.
- The second one is perfectly clear, and has no redundancies.
- If you removed the repeated words from the first example, it would be ambiguous.
- The second one is clearly better, but both are correct.
- (2) is not better.
- It should be written as "is turned over" I disagree.
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The second one is perfectly clear, and has no redundancies.
If you removed the repeated words from the first example, it would be ambiguous.
The second one is clearly better, but both are correct.
(2) is not better. It should be written as "is turned over"
I disagree.
If you removed the repeated words from the first example, it would be ambiguous.
The second one is clearly better, but both are correct.
(2) is not better. It should be written as "is turned over"
I disagree.
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If I may make a picky comment, you are making some errors with spacing around punctuation which gives your writing a scruffy appearance.
A captive ,when turned over... -- Wrong
A captive , when turned over... -- Wrong
A captive, when turned over... -- Correct
It should be written as "is turned over" . -- Wrong
It should be written as "is turned over".
A captive ,when turned over... -- Wrong
A captive , when turned over... -- Wrong
A captive, when turned over... -- Correct
It should be written as "is turned over" . -- Wrong
It should be written as "is turned over".
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