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Adnan1947 Posted 17 years ago
Grammar
Sentence Correction
Kindly help me out in the following sentence:
To be part of an investment banking organization where I will have the opportunity to contribute significantly towards its research activities and simultaneously be able to enhance my quantitative ability.
Is the above structure parallel:
I am confused whether to add "where I will simultaneously be able to enhance"
or is the use "where I will" is understood without its use.
also if I just write:
To be part of an investment banking organization where I will have the opportunity to contribute significantly towards its research activities and simultaneously enhance my quantitative ability.
Regards,
Adnan
To be part of an investment banking organization where I will have the opportunity to contribute significantly towards its research activities and simultaneously be able to enhance my quantitative ability.
Is the above structure parallel:
I am confused whether to add "where I will simultaneously be able to enhance"
or is the use "where I will" is understood without its use.
also if I just write:
To be part of an investment banking organization where I will have the opportunity to contribute significantly towards its research activities and simultaneously enhance my quantitative ability.
Regards,
Adnan
Top answer
Hi, Let me first say that the phrase 'quantitative ability' seems extremely vague to me. Is there another way to say this? It sounds, more or less, like you just want to improve your math skills.
- Hi, Let me first say that the phrase 'quantitative ability' seems extremely vague to me.
- Is there another way to say this?
- It sounds, more or less, like you just want to improve your math skills.
- Best wishes, Clive
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Hi,
Let me first say that the phrase 'quantitative ability' seems extremely vague to me.
Is there another way to say this? It sounds, more or less, like you just want to improve your math skills.
Best wishes, Clive
Let me first say that the phrase 'quantitative ability' seems extremely vague to me.
Is there another way to say this? It sounds, more or less, like you just want to improve your math skills.
Best wishes, Clive
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well then could I write?:
quantitative and analytical abilities.
To be part of an investment banking organization where I will have the opportunity to contribute significantly towards its research activities and simultaneously be able to enhance my quantitative and analytical ability.
Would that help?.
quantitative and analytical abilities.
To be part of an investment banking organization where I will have the opportunity to contribute significantly towards its research activities and simultaneously be able to enhance my quantitative and analytical ability.
Would that help?.
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Hi,
I'd like to understand the sentence before commenting.
I still don't know what 'quantitative ability' means. If you have this ability, what can you do?
Best wishes, Clive
I'd like to understand the sentence before commenting.
I still don't know what 'quantitative ability' means. If you have this ability, what can you do?
Best wishes, Clive
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Thanks for your suggestion:
The word quantitative abilty in fact refers to maths skill as you had rightly mentioned earlier, its one of the technical skills in the related domain.
Possibly I could rephrase the sentence as follows:
To be part of an investment banking organization where I will have the opportunity to contribute significantly towards its research activit
The word quantitative abilty in fact refers to maths skill as you had rightly mentioned earlier, its one of the technical skills in the related domain.
Possibly I could rephrase the sentence as follows:
To be part of an investment banking organization where I will have the opportunity to contribute significantly towards its research activit
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Hi,
I see. Thanks.
The structure of the senetnce seems fine to me. However, it seems rather wordy, particularly the last part. Do you need to say 'in the related domain'?
How about just and simultaneously enhance my technical skills ?
Clive
Clive
I see. Thanks.
The structure of the senetnce seems fine to me. However, it seems rather wordy, particularly the last part. Do you need to say 'in the related domain'?
How about just and simultaneously enhance my technical skills ?
Clive
Clive
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Thanks a lot Clive. Will remove that part.
So the final sentence is as follows:
To be part of an investment banking organization where I will have the opportunity to contribute significantly towards its research activities and simultaneously enhance my quantitative ability.
Since my doubt was related to parallelism of the sentence structure. What I could
So the final sentence is as follows:
To be part of an investment banking organization where I will have the opportunity to contribute significantly towards its research activities and simultaneously enhance my quantitative ability.
Since my doubt was related to parallelism of the sentence structure. What I could
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Hi,
It all depends on what your meaning you want to convey. Once you decide that, you can chose wording that makes that clear. Here are some examples for you to consider, with comments.
These examples that are simplified versions of your sentence.
To be part of a company where I have the opportunity to sing and dance.
Here, the meaning itself is so obvio
It all depends on what your meaning you want to convey. Once you decide that, you can chose wording that makes that clear. Here are some examples for you to consider, with comments.
These examples that are simplified versions of your sentence.
To be part of a company where I have the opportunity to sing and dance.
Here, the meaning itself is so obvio
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