sentence construction and grammar

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which one of the two is correct or more correct:

Nothing would excite me more than to get an assignment, a consultancy work at this hour—freshly graduated and highly motivated.

or

Nothing would excite me more than getting an assignment, a consultancy work at this hour—freshly graduated and highly motivated.

Clive · Accepted Answer

Both 'getting' and 'to get' are OK.

But neither sentence is correct..
'Work' is uncountable. Say 'some consultancy work'.

In addition, your sentence is clumsy and jerky.

'At this hour' is unnatural.

'Excited' is not usually used in the context of applying for a job, if that is what you are doing.

Avoid dashes in all but casual writing.

Ty again and repost, if you wish.
Clive

Sonam Tshering · Answer

Mr. Clive, Thank you so much. I really appreciate it.

How about this one:

Nothing would make me more happy than getting some consultancy work at the moment. I am a highly motivated fresh graduate.

I'd like you to kindly check the following if you have time, please (not urgent, you may do it at ur convenience).

I had submitted my first-ever expression of interest (EOI) to an organization some three months ago soon after the inception of my consultancy firm. A month later a friend who’s working with the organization told me that a consultant has been recruited long time ago. I thought at least they would inform me, an applicant of the decision out of courtesy if not for anything else but I was wrong. Perhaps I was utterly undeserving!

I made my second attempt when I saw a call for EOI on the website of my previous employer. It was not only relevant to my research but also a pressing issue that I am keenly interested to work on. Last night, again a friend with the organization informed me that my firm has not been selected to undertake the assignment.

I don’t know if I should make the third attempt; may be I should for it may transform negative thoughts constantly coming to my mind by way of this endeavor and provide an opportunity to start afresh. May be I shouldn’t as it may drown me in depression.

It seems I’m scripting my firm’s obituary before properly finalizing its logo but you can rest assured that this doesn’t deter us from achieving its vision of becoming the first independent policy studies journal in the country. For the time being I may be compelled to explore my bread and butter elsewhere. I am sorry but I’ve no choice.

Thank you all for the ‘likes’ and your kind words.

Clive · Answer

How about this one:

Nothing would make me more happy than getting some consultancy work at the moment. I am a highly motivated fresh graduate. Much better

I'd like you to kindly check the following if you have time, please (not urgent, you may do it at ur convenience).

I submitted my first-ever expression of interest (EOI) to an organization some three months ago, soon after I started my consultancy firm. A month later a friend who’s working with the organization told me that a consultant has been recruited.o. I thought at least they would inform me of the decision out of courtesy, but I was wrong.
Perhaps I was utterly undeserving! <<< Unclear what you mean. I suggest deleting this

I made my second attempt when I saw a call for EOI on the website of my previous employer. It was not only relevant to my research but also a pressing issue that I am keenly interested in working on. Last night, again a friend with the organization informed me that my firm has not been selected to undertake the assignment.

I don’t know if I should make the third attempt. Maybe I should, for it may transform negative thoughts constantly coming to my mind by way of this endeavor, and provide an opportunity to start afresh. Maybe I shouldn’t, as it may drown me in depression.

It seems I’m writing my firm’s obituary before properly finalizing its logo, but you can rest assured that this doesn’t deter us from achieving our vision of becoming the first independent policy studies journal in the country. For the time being I may be compelled to explore earning my bread and butter elsewhere. I am sorry but I’ve no choice.

Thank you all for the ‘likes’ and your kind words.

Sonam Tshering · Answer

Thank you so much for the help.

Sonam Tshering · Answer

Are these sentences correct?

1) Certainly not, when I don’t even stand a chance to give it a try. If my experience and observation are anything to go by, I don’t think I can make it anytime sooner. I’d undoubtedly persevere if there was a blinker of hope…

https://www.facebook.com/Jyatsho Concerning Facebook ‘like,’ if we don’t interpret it in context, it is indeed confusing. Lol

I still think if it wasn’t for not-so healthy system of ours, you would have been on finest med specialist at our cash-strapped hospitals which are perennially suffering from doctor shortage.

You’re a role model for those of us in whose sense of integrity the status quo of conducting business doesn’t fit into. It simply is against our inner values.

I am sure there will be many of us tying to emulate your success.

https://www.facebook.com/yangchenwangmo.dendup It’s heart melting to hear such timely inspiring words backed up by motivational stories from you after a long gap. Thank you so much. My good wishes to you too.

https://www.facebook.com/karma.tenzin.75873 You never fail to infuse me with zeal and optimism when I am down lol Thank you and good luck with your studies.

Clive · Answer

Please start a new thread next time, for new queries.

Are these sentences correct?

1) Certainly not, when I don’t even stand a chance of giving it a try. If my experience and observation are anything to go by, I don’t think I can make it anytime sooner. I’d undoubtedly persevere if there was a glimmer of hope…

https://www.facebook.com/Jyatsho Concerning Facebook ‘like,’ if we don’t interpret it in context, it is indeed confusing. Lol

I still think if it wasn’t for this not-so-healthy system of ours, you would have been one of the finest medical specialists at our cash-strapped hospitals which are perennially suffering from a doctor shortage.

You’re a role model for those of us in whose sense of integrity the status quo of conducting business doesn’t fit into.<<< This is a very bad sentence. Try to rewrite it.

It simply is against our inner values.

I am sure there will be many of us trying to emulate your success.

https://www.facebook.com/yangchenwangmo.dendup It’s heart-warming to hear such timely inspiring words backed up by motivational stories from you after a long gap. Thank you so much. My good wishes to you too.

https://www.facebook.com/karma.tenzin.75873 You never fail to infuse me with zeal and optimism when I am down lol Thank you and good luck with your studies.
Use lol only in text messages.

Sonam Tshering · Answer

From now on I'll start a new thread for new queries.

Sorry for the delay. I've been busy. I

Thank you so much for your correction and advice, I am learning something new every day.

Here's my revised version:

"You’re a role model for those of us in whose sense of integrity the status quo of conducting business doesn’t fit into."

The fashionable way of going about business in our country doesn't fit into our sense of integrity. You're a role model to us.

Clive · Answer

Here's my revised version:

"You’re a role model for those of us in whose sense of integrity the status quo of conducting business doesn’t fit into.
Terrible!

" The fashionable way of going about business in our country offends our sense of integrity. You're a role model to us.

Sonam Tshering · Answer

Thank you. Of the two sentences, the former is not a revised version. I've quoted it for your reference only.

Clive · Answer

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