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Cboutin3 Posted 12 years ago
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Sentence clarity question?

Is it clear that the 'new emperor' only sent the 'minotaur legion', not the ogre army? Or should I change the wording? The rebels faced an assault from an ogre army and a minotaur legion that had been sent by the new emperor, Ardnor de-Droka, the dark-hearted son of Nephera and the recently slain Hotak.
  

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It is not clear. Both the ogre army and the minotaur legion could have been sent by the new emperor. If the distinction is important, yes, go ahead and change the wording.

— Elanguest

  • It is not clear.
  • Both the ogre army and the minotaur legion could have been sent by the new emperor.
  • If the distinction is important, yes, go ahead and change the wording.
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It is not clear. Both the ogre army and the minotaur legion could have been sent by the new emperor. If the distinction is important, yes, go ahead and change the wording.
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Okay thanks. Is this revision better? The rebels soon faced an assault from an ogre army that served Golgren and a minotaur legion sent by the new Emperor of the Minotaur Empire, Ardnor de-Droka, the dark-hearted son of Nephera and the recently slain Hotak.
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